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The Off Season
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The Off Season |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
He marched out of the cold dark north Looking more the two legged polar bear Than anything human His skin and cap Trophies of the arctic beast With near height to match Protected his person While each hand was gloved by the claw Whereby better to rend the flesh Should it come to close quarters The vestiges of his face featured Scars of past hunting seasons But was made less visible by white braids and matching beard What gave him away at the close Was a belt of sealskin A finely worked silver buckle And two ice-pick axes of blue steel Tucked to the ready Though one might mistake the measure of the man His mass was hardened muscle More solid than the frozen whale blubber he ate to maintain Much more His long strides Sliced the white powder Like a cutter in the ocean frost Splitting snowdrifts in two They spoke of suppressed power A readiness to spring at the slightest provocation And the ability to travel miles without measure He was clearly the most dangerous element Upon the frozen tundra Lines around the eyes and mouth promised the potential for a jolly laugh But his eyes were set to the grim purpose at hand They were focused on the coming fight Where Evil stalks the land And he has a list of the naughty It’s a long list And it’s the off season But Christmas is right around the corner The presents might come a little late this year |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Wow, Santa `Claws` , alright~! (sorry, couldn`t resist)  Magnificent write!  Best~ A |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Yeaaaaa! A vengeful Santa. Gotta love it! Very, very thought provoking. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Never thought it would end this way! Fine writing, Andrew.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
AndrewS - I always thought that Santa was a Viking type, horn wearing, bear clawed, Evil defeating bringer of Christmas presents after the Off Season. Thanks for confirming it. Loved it. Namyh P.S. - I still hope he doesn't forget my red Captain America pellet gun with optional whistle blower this time. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Santa presented Robert Service style and with such a twist. Absolutely superb writing! Sorry I was almost wishing it was about something else but then that's just weird ol me. Write on! Eric [This message has been edited by ethome (12-03-2010 02:26 AM).] |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Marvelous description of a rare man! I am thoroughly entertained reading this. He certainly puts a new spin on "nice!" I always thought that word was too generic anyway. What a talent for spinning intrigue. So glad I saw this! ~K |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Heheh I like this version...off season indeed... I wonder why he has never caught me then |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Amaryllis: How could you resist? Thanks for the read & write.Jerry: Yep, Santa has to get just a little P.O.ed looking at all those naughty names. Thanks for the write. Prasad: Glad I caught you off guard. Just be sure Santa doesn’t! Namyh: ME TOO! Can’t you just see it! And he’s just THE shock troop, because there’s a whole army of elves bringing up the rear. As for the Captain America pellet gun… well, you know what happened to Ralphie… “You’ll shoot your eye out!”Ethome: Been there, done that. Glad you enjoyed the way it went. Klassy Lassy: Thanks for looking in. Ya, nice is nice, but Santa is a Bad A** during the off season. Paula Finn: You better keep an eye out... this could be the year. Thanks for the read and write. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Novus_Os Member
since 2010-07-21
Posts 115West Coast, USA |
I tend to try and go too conservative, but you go for it. I enjoyed this work much. "Santa is a bad a$$ during the off season"..LOL. Too awesome. |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
I read this a couple of days ago but the image of a vengeful Santa refused to leave my memory. Nice write. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The list of the naughty was Schmutzli's business when I was a child in Switzerland. See here: http://www.twofoolszuerich.com/2009/12/santas-little-helper-schmutzli.html I see that in times of crisis, even Santa Claus is burdened with all the work alone .A very captivating write and brought memories too ... Love, Margherita |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Novus Os: I'm glad you enjoyed. Ya, that is kind of a funny thought. Thanks for posting. Earl: Glad the image stuck with you. While writing this one, the Molly Hatchet's "Flirtin' With Disaster" album cover kept coming to mind. Thanks for the read and write. Margherita: Thanks for the read n' write. I checked out the link. Very interesting stuff. I had never heard of this combo before, but it sounds like somthing the Church would try to incorporate and use to their advantage. I guess with a name like Schmultzli, you'd be P.O.ed too. Thanks for sharing. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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