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naturegirl
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0 posted 2010-11-30 05:56 PM



My future waits patiently
unfurling petal by petal,
some torn and bruised.
Those of perfect hue
and scent have few
thorns to prick unwary
fingers. To draw blood
where none need be
spilt. Layers fall softly,
sensuously,the bud finally
revealed, tender, pristine, absolute.
Like a devotional offering,
the heart laid bare.
My gift the key.



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Dark Stranger
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1 posted 2010-11-30 06:29 PM


enjoyed the prospective ms
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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2 posted 2010-11-30 07:14 PM


Oh, I like the imagery. Layers are complicated but one always hopes what lies under is worth it.

-Trina.

"A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal."

katahdin
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3 posted 2010-11-30 07:57 PM


Very nicely done. Enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

JerryPat
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4 posted 2010-11-30 09:49 PM


Like the grit and the layers. It is the layers that do us in eventually, because keeping up with them is impossible and they all come tumbling down eventually.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

naturegirl
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5 posted 2010-12-02 11:53 AM


Thank you all for your kind comments. I think perhaps we have to peel away the layers to reveal the truth hidden beneath?
Balladeer
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6 posted 2010-12-02 05:08 PM


Excellent work, miss, with a good message. Great minds think alike!
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Prasad Nataraj
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7 posted 2010-12-03 03:35 AM


Fine writing, beautiful images and got to agree with the peeling of layers to know what is in store.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

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