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The Shadow of You
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The Shadow of You |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY 
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I've been living in the shadow of you never knowing of the things people speak fondly of such fools I was sheltered by the tanquil rage enlivened by the embracing pain mesmerized by your addictive taste and it was all lies I've been living in the shadow of you Hate. -Trina. "A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal." |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
One of the best of yours I have read. Dynamic! . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Time to step out of the shade and into the warmth of the sun. You write a powerful, but unsettling, piece. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Jerry, Andrew- Thanx for looking in  -Trina. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
You have a following.I am never disapointed. latearrival |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
very nice flow of words. |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Unsettling as mentioned but a piece that leaves a strong impression. |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine lines these” mesmerized by your addictive taste” sadly true many times in life. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"I've been living in the shadow of you Hate." Definitely not the way to live for anyone~~ hate accomplishes nothing. Nicely expressed. M |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
it's a fine line betwix love & hate - powerful words |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
I like your style and the way your ending takes you off guard. Enjoyed it very much. LGR |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
James- Thanx so much. LateA- You're too kind. Mike- Thanx! Earl- Unsettling indeed. Thanx. Prasad- Yeah, sad but true. Thanx. Nakd- I agree. Thanx Nature- It is a fine line, I've often wondered if theres a gray area between love and hate....perhaps dislike?  Thanx. LGR- Thanx for looking in.  -Trina. "A heart that can't feel its broken- can't heal." |
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