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Open Poetry #46

The other side of love

LivingConfused
Junior Member

since 2009-12-27

Posts 40

0 posted 2010-01-05 02:13 AM

The other side of love

I stand before a door.
Afraid of the other side.
Comforted by the torturous memories.
Of a love passed.

I need only the courage to reach out,
to touch the other side of love.
I find you standing by my side,
holding my hand helping me.
I turn the key....

I tried to write something a little happier but still from my heart. I don't know if this counts as the former by it is from the latter

Father
Member

since 2009-12-15

Posts 58
Confusion

1 posted 2010-01-07 09:44 PM

The latter is more important I believe.
This was succinct and full of emotional content.
Excellent work!

LivingConfused
Junior Member

since 2009-12-27

Posts 40

2 posted 2010-01-08 01:51 AM

Thank you Father, I am attempting to lean meter and feet. It seems my poems will start free form and then I may try to form them into a structure. Trying some of the lessons in the Poetry workshop. I am beginning to enjoy writing poetry.

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

3 posted 2010-01-08 06:23 PM

Yes, it qualifies as happy...or, at least, hopeful and positive. That's a good thing.

There are parts where you have very good meter. Nice to see you working on it.

Best to you, poet

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

4 posted 2010-03-20 08:02 AM

I can understand your desire to want to write in meter. I also try to make an effort in this respect. It is difficult but I think that you made a good show here. I want to encourage you to continue.

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