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....Go on Faith
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....Go on Faith |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
...Go on Faith Scorched sand sizzled hot with a blister. Rising heat sucked the air out the day. And the motionless sun like an unblinking eye poked bones and my brains in its way. I buckled to my knees from exhaustion then my face hit the sand full flat. Without water, each breath was a dry pain hurtin' and my blood thickened more from its lack. A pump handle shimmered in the day's heat and I focused, crawling to it 'cross the land. Hanging there was a sign, "Go North five feet. Dig for water in a box in the sand." Scratched eyes searched frantic for its pinpoint. Charred fingers clawed the sand going deep. As I dug with a frenzy, then I felt something hard. Had I liquid for some tears, I would weep. In the box, I found a bottle full of water. "Don't Drink" said the jug's top sign. "Pour half, prime the pump then wait five. Pour the other half in, pump nine." I blistered in my madness for the water. Five minutes more of thirst was too great. I twisted off the lid and I tilted up the jug but those words "Don't Drink" made me wait. After nine pumps, I fell against the handle. Liquid sputtered then it spurted from the spout. I was drenched and wallowed, bathed and swallowed in water, sweet by words I rued to doubt. And on the bottom of the bottle was a clear sign, "Fill this bottle for the box, please do, for the next soul searching for a Life-raft who may have to go on Faith like you !" Namyh |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
I adore this.. oh what a wonderful message! Excuse me, I need to go get a drink of water, now..  Great read!  My best~ Amaryllis |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Very motivational, Namyh. Faith. In dire straights too even stop to read the instructions is amazing, but to actually pour that life-giving water in the pump is faith personified. I recall a passage from the Bible, "if you have faith like a grain of mustard seed," and this poem spells out just what that would entail. Wonderful write. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine writing on a delicate and powerful subject. Enjoyed this write, Namyh. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my now this was just what I needed |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like it very much. Great little story very well presented. Go that extra and do things right. Eric |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Amaryllis – I am honored that this piece induced some thirst for a drink of water for you. I am equally honored that you found a wonderful message here which I hope will come in handy when most needed. Now I’m getting’ kind of thirsty too. Where’s my Gatorade? LOL. Thanks Amaryllis for stopping in. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
JerryPat – Aren’t we lucky human beings to have Faith that doesn’t require a high school education or college degree or an elite family pedigree. It’s there inside where we often least expect it to be. Maybe there’s more to that grain of mustard seed than we think. Thanks JerryP for finding some wonder here and for your enjoyment. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Prasad Nataraj – Believe it or not, this was an offshoot from a documentary on desert life. Go figure! Amazing it is where we scribbler of words get our inspiration sometimes, often from the remotest of places. Thanks PrasadN for your words. So very glad you enjoyed. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
passing shadows – If this work provided some inspiration, upliftment and just what was needed, then I’m proud to be its author that makes the delivery. Keep it for as long as needed PS and thanks for the ‘oh my’. Namyh |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Eric – I think you nailed it right on the head Eric. It’s a little story indeed but hopefully with a bigger impact that goes that extra mile with a little Faith. We tend to have more of it than we use. Thanks Eric. Namyh |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Take what you need, but leave more than you take. This poem is so powerful and wonderfully written. I love the story that you told and I love how you told it. Thank you. Alison |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Alison – “Take what you need, but leave more than you take.” Well Alison, that says it all in a nutshell and I thank you. I’m so proud you loved the story and how it was told. If you ever find yourself thirsty in life’s desert, remember this and don’t drink until you’ve primed the pump. And thanks for stopping by with your enjoyment. Namyh |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
 Such a great poem. A |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Alison – Thanks Alison for your enjoyment. Namyh |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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mikeandrew Member
since 2010-11-18
Posts 198 |
Nice work thanks. |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
JamesM – Hope this put a smile on ya and thanks. Namyh MikeD – Thanks for stopping by and bringing your enjoyment. Namyh |
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