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love unrequited |
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2gabby Junior Member
since 2010-11-21
Posts 23 |
Mornings I laugh at your mismatching socks Midday I fancy your lips Evenings I gaze at your pretty blonde hair Nighttime I dream of your hips This moment I’ve got you Alone in my bed I pretend that you’ll be there forever. I pretend “real housewives” is “gone with the wind” And inch toward your breast, oh so clever …………. RING. This love unrequited it burns in my soul The fire that fuels me burns out at the toll Of your phone. As you pick it up, my heart gives a sigh, Grateful you can’t see the tears that it cries. The fuel that ignites me does wither away As I watch your lips curl, wondering: What does he say? Your eyes are ablaze with a fire that I know, Yet brighter! More lively! You are not alone. Wordless, you stand up and walk out my door, And again I decide I can’t take anymore. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Sounds like a lover's version of the old Catch-22 scenario. Damned if you do, damned if you don't. Enjoyed. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
What a great first post... I love the way you handle words, so poignant...looking forward to more of your writings~ welcome to Pip!  My best~ Amaryllis |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
love the piece a lot! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ouch! A solid piece for your first offering. Bring it on... and Welcome! "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well, that's a real kiss off isn't it? Well expressed piece Gabby. Flows real nice and I was getting all excited and then over the cliff I went with you. However, that's the point you're trying to get across, so I say, well done!! Eric |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Fine first post, paints the picture really well. Keep writing. Welcome to PIP. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Great stuff! More Please EustaWelcome to the Blue Buffet |
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2gabby Junior Member
since 2010-11-21
Posts 23 |
thanks all! appreciate the support. my first poem ever- no idea know what made me do it! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Gabby. Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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BugBuggy Member
since 2005-12-19
Posts 130michigan |
I enjoyed this one very much if it was your first please continue it was a very great read |
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