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Brother Robert 10,000th
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Brother Robert 10,000th |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Brother Robert I curse the heavy load I bear a wild ride gone bad. Inside somewhere I judge unfair these feelings I've unclad. My five dear brothers cast like one, no less at shunning me self righteous wished me done, pronouncements made in heat. Inclement tales of me they tell, ungodly prophecies they preach. From their surplus storage swell uncaring prodigies they speak. Beyond existance nature's ride ends suddenly with sleep rolls past unworthy minds not noticing how brief. Through a vine I hear toll bells, dear Lord I groan with grief. From this chambered drunken hell I feel their blood in me. The grace of grief and father time, a distant message brief speaking Robert's soon to die, now he's requesting me. My heart cried out sick afraid, " Robert please don't die! I'll be home within the day before darkness steals the light." The distant way was like a dream like the wind I did drive. Along the route the evergreens seemed waving on my flight. My shocked heart and soul stirred. My eyes filled up with gems. And all the distance I incurred I prayed he would forgive. In the setting sun I felt a stir a calm and cooling breeze. On the porch by the banister sat Robert ill at ease. His eyes full of helpless pain he forced a smile to face. Outstretched arms he held my way, we smothered in embrace. " Oh Daniel now you ease this pain take hold your brother's love and to God I pray your gain for the waste we've overcome." In my arms he was released, my tears poured like spring rain and as I crushed him to my breast his soul ran through my veins. Filled with selfish haste I missed self serving at great cost the wonderments of his gifts I suffered with his loss. These days, Robert passed along, I keep gazing at the stars. We're seen as brothers six less one but I know five plus one we are. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I've returned ti this poem at least four, maybe five times. I have a feeling others may have also. the reason, of course, is that I don't quite know how to comment. This Brother Robert, is he your real brother? And where does the 10,000 come in? I loved the poem and its sadness and pain and intricate way of involving the narrator to the ills of kin. So . . . I'll just say good poem, for that it was. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Loss well expressed, Eric. Great grief and sadness in these lines. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Jerry Thanks for coming back for the ponders. The 10,000th post I have made here a PIP. See the number up by my ugly mug. Nope, not my real brother.....From imaginationville. I appreciate the comments very much. Eric [This message has been edited by ethome (11-19-2010 04:09 AM).] |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Congrats on your 10,000th and a good one it is too (sniff, sniff)it holds much painful truths. ebm |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Okay. I woke up on the dumb side of the bed when I wrote that I'm assuming. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Prasad for read and the visit. Eric |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Eric, What a passionate expression of love and loss. I felt the intensity that I am confident I would feel at the loss of one of my brothers. Very well done. Thank you. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Eric, Congratulations on taking a moment in your time of PiP, 10000, to encapsulate such a memory of life. You are surpassing yourself. I know. K |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hi EBM do you want a tissue for that. Thanks for the kind reply and the sentiments. Eric Jerry He he it happens to all of us and you certainly ain't dumb my friend! Eric |
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