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Alison
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

0 posted 2010-10-18 12:10 PM


The words don’t visit much anymore
They used to tap at darkened window panes
Catching my mind’s attention with invitation
Stale sentences now drift lazily out of view
And I don’t write much anymore.

Pleasure once filled quiet nights
As thoughts were caught and stories built
Letters formed words to frame sentences
And brush strokes caught dreams,
Capturing them for only a moment
To be partnered in a poem.

My mind breathed behind closed eyelids
And my fingers beckoned at thoughts
That longed to come forth and live
To breathe without need to be heard,
Simply to be released to fly free.

-

Alison

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katahdin
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1 posted 2010-10-18 12:58 PM


Wonderfully penned!
Kat >^..^<

Marchmadness
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2 posted 2010-10-18 01:28 AM


The words were just resting, Alison. Obviously they are dancing again and beautifully too.
                                Ida

secondhanddreampoet
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3 posted 2010-10-18 10:27 AM


superb writing and imagery!

[expressing that which we all experience
  periodically]

MUCH sustained applause for this 'penning'!!

Eusta B. Mae
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4 posted 2010-10-18 10:38 AM


Stale sentences now drift lazily out of view

This really caught my eye. I can't fathom a stale word in your head ever.  You are a guaranteed good read...always!  ebm

Misty Lilacs
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5 posted 2010-10-18 12:47 PM


I don't think you have a problem. I think your words were just resting and have now burst forth.

Great piece of writing, as always!!

ooxx  Marti


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passing shadows
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6 posted 2010-10-19 05:06 AM


I do relate dear Alison
*sigh*

Margherita
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7 posted 2010-10-19 08:59 AM


Perfectly rendered temporaneous state of things! Relax, organize a dancing party for the words in your imagination, and they will flood your mind again in joy ... just as they have done here!

Brava, dear Alison!

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Dr.Moose1
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8 posted 2010-10-19 12:04 PM


Alison,
I was kinda hoping a few would come "dancing" my way, lol, but
I now see they found their way back.

Doc

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9 posted 2010-10-20 01:13 AM


Beautifully written, Z.

-Arana Darkwolf
Like a cat, I'll land on my feet. I always do.

Daddy Goose38
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10 posted 2010-11-19 08:16 PM


Your thoughts do eventually come forth, dear Ali.
Hey Ali.  Can you help me find a poem "crimson colors" I forgot what pen name it is under.  I am confused trying to use Pip search function and xox so many many times.
Jaime


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11 posted 2010-11-19 09:01 PM


I have not read a better descriptive passage about the loss of wordpower than this, Alison (I keep wanting to put another "l" in your name. Very well done.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

ethome
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12 posted 2010-11-19 10:53 PM


Oh, I think you're all the way back and then some!!
However, I have never heard a muse shut down expressed so well before.

Eric

IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS.

Alison
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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
13 posted 2010-11-20 01:17 AM


How rude.  I didn't thank one person for their response to this poem.  Do you mind if I thank you all in one response.  I treasure each word written to the poems that I share here.  I learn from them - and consider each person's opinion.  Thank you all - and Jerry and Eric?  Thank you for your extra kind comments.

I treasure you all.
Alison

Alison
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14 posted 2010-11-20 01:26 AM


PS - Jaime, I'll see what I can do and if I find it, I'll mail it on to you.

Hugs to you,
Ali

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