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The Dress
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The Dress |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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Why do I keep it draped in dust and time hung in empty folds in the dark reaches of my cluttered closet once it was a scarlet weapon of mass destruction silken, laced at the narrow waist and red, red, red now a shell of fabric, only harmless, quiet but it heats the corners where cobwebs dare to sleep that my hand may brush it`s dormant pulse when searching for a knit or woolen tweed |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Man, few people have the ability to touch the heartstrings in the way you do with such simplicity. You have my total admiration, miss.. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
I thank you, Balladeer  ~Amaryllis |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
“it heats the corners where cobwebs dare to sleep” especially love theses lines , fine writing Amaryllis. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Yep, now I want to write. You do that to me. Love this one too. A |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you so much, Prasad! ~Amaryllis |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thanks Alison! Methinks you already do... my best~ Amaryllis |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"once it was a scarlet weapon of mass destruction silken, laced at the narrow waist and red, red, red" Whew it's a good thing George W is gone. I'd hate to hear of you writing your memoirs in crowbar hotel somewhere. Actually, all joking aside, that verse is reflective but oh so passionate and it really struck me. All very good! Eric |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you so much, Eric~ that means a lot Best~ Amaryllis |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
quote: Ah, the "enticing" dress. What power it has. Enjoyed. -Trina. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Yes...and in this poem, what power it `had`~ past tense! Lol Thanks, Trina Amaryllis |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I sure relate! I threw mine away long ago, but I'm married now so I guess it just doesn't matter. ...but ah, the beauty of youth, huh? |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Great write, Amaryllis! We never forget, do we? Helen |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
This is what is called milking it for all its worth, and believe me it's worth much. Constructive criticism? I have something. Keep writing in such a deep and warm manner. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
but I'm married now so I guess it just doesn't matter. Ah, dear Dixie, that is why so many marriages go down the tubes!  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Simply fantastic writing Amarylis. Ida |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Amaryllis-Way to go! Excellent capture! Loved it! ebm |
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