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Open Poetry #46

Inward

Elric
Junior Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 43
southbend, WA

0 posted 2010-11-11 06:56 PM

I fold myself inward
Away from the world
Always inward
Trapping all emotion inside.

Smaller and smaller I become
Until I am nothing
Invisible and safe once again.

All emotion trapped inside
Until more comes rushing in
Forcing me to fold inward once again.

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

1 posted 2010-11-11 07:54 PM

. . . and around and around we go . . .

Nothing to critique as far as I am concerned, you have covered your tracks well . . .

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

2 posted 2010-11-11 08:23 PM

If one always "folds inwards" eventually, one will explode. Won't they? Enjoyed.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

3 posted 2010-11-12 08:31 AM

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt makes a good point about exploding...and that make for some pretty intersting shrappnel. ebm

Elric
Junior Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 43
southbend, WA

4 posted 2010-11-12 01:31 PM

Thank you for the feed back.
Yes that is a good point, I may have to change this up a little.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2010-11-12 09:39 PM

Do I know this feeling and invisible safety.

Well told, Elric~

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