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Second Chance
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Second Chance |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Second Chance She was always a ruby I some rose colored glass, or Gift me another I’ll give it back to you chance Proper he Dakota Twin dialed and folklore met He wondered But never faltered Together, Folks wanted more But never spoke their wish Other than this is how Things get done Then left it to me. Waywardly flashes Cause skewed moments To become circumspect to Prying eyes who really don’t care So let others pry oysters Meanwhile, I bled. Some stones arise by quake I rise again, unwashed, Unencumbered Whatever stone I might be I am of fire And brim And light. © krj 2010 Nov 8 |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Ah, a fire, brimming light-show you are. I think that will work. "Prying eyes who really don’t care So let others pry oysters" . . . Loved this. Kinda is the tone for the whole poem. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes you are I believe you might be a diamond  |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Last stanza is just killer for me! And as for the rest of the poem it flows with the beauty that only you can pen. I love it! Eusta. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun..without the veils is lovely on you...enjoyed this one lady!! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
As I read this, I was thinking, "This poet is stoned!" I had no idea how right I was!! Loved it, btw....so what's new! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie...All I can think to say with my mouth hanging open is, yes you are!  |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Wow... loving these last 3 lines... I adore the way you put words together, Sunshine Best~ Amaryllis |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
All I can say is this a gem of a write. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Whatever stone I might be I am of fire And brim And light." Wow! You most certainly are sunny one. Missing you. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Of course you would be that kind of stone! Hugs, RF |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Some stones arise by quake I rise again, unwashed, Unencumbered nice ma'am..... real nice.... |
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Dakota Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 125New York |
Caterpillar to Butterfly we all sometimes need a "Second Chance". Beautifully written! Dave |
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