Underplay (inspired by Helen)

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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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Between the Lines

0 posted 2010-11-07 07:38 AM

Underplay

It was a pity-me kind of morning,
starting out with tears of regret
of anxiety filled thought moments
releasing those hard to forget.

Took a mall walk to exorcise feelings
eyeing the sales of the day
talking to strangers as always
opinions answered their way.

Bringing smiles when helpful to others
cheering insides this pity-me day
opening to thoughts that tomorrow
will begin in a more calming way.

M

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

1 posted 2010-11-07 08:24 AM

"It was a pity-me kind of morning,"

I do like that line, eh sounds better than just "a bad day". Lovely piece. Indeed, theres always hope that tomorrow will be better. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2010-11-07 08:27 AM

Hi Maureen.

I am of the opinion that all feelings need to be honoured to the self if no one else. Writing about the moments of life whatever they may be helps me do that. As time passes, however, we return unto them all at various stages and the trick is to know that we've been there, done that, so we can move more easily through them. It's never easy - just easier.

I guess I'm the story teller and you the poetess but hope you enjoyed my story as much as I did your poem.

Regards
Helen

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

3 posted 2010-11-07 08:56 AM

I believe these kind of thoughts, feelings, and experiences apply to way too many
of us these days (especially those who have become disenfranchised 'fringe-dwellers'
of the "Runaway American Dream") ...

v. well expressed!

Balladeer

Administrator

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 2010-11-07 09:10 AM

No better way to get rid of a pity-me day than to take the time to bring a smile to others

Prasad Nataraj
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since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

5 posted 2010-11-08 02:16 AM

Fine writing. Fine transformation from negative to positive energy. Everyday kindness can bring in great change in everyone’s lives.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

Eusta B. Mae
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since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

6 posted 2010-11-08 08:29 AM

We of the pity me days a plenty, find all kinds of unigue ways to do our best to turn it around...and I agree that yours is one of the best. Thanks for sharing it.ebm

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2010-11-08 08:33 AM

well said Ms M...
always a pleasure to find your words on the blue pages.

enjoyed

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2010-11-09 02:33 AM

I can see you walking through the mall talking to folks

I think if I had a mall around here, I'd do that too.

Good write!

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