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Trouble |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America 
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Shiny silk dress hugged her body The dame stood over me I could tell she wasn't my angel By the way she filled out that red dress She leaned over to whisper in my ear Showing more than She should've After all, I'm a man Even if I'm lying in the stinking gutter Hey Shamus, remember me? Couldn't place the face Never would forget those legs And the way they held her body up The rest of her wasn't bad either I wondered why I was flat on my back I wondered more why The dame was flashing me And holding a gat Closed my eyes, decided I didn't want to know Wanna know who did this to you? The voice and the legs and the . . . rest Sounded and looked familiar Something told me The rest I didn't want to know I squeezed my arms into my chest Trying to feel my .38 Wasn't there I was naked even though dressed She wasn't through talking It's a good thing I came along. I never turn down a dame Who wants to give a helping hand After pushing myself up And checking out my frame Nothing out of place No blood, no extra holes Nasty bump on my head Felt woozy like I'd been on a bender Zeroed in on the gat gal Recognize me? Last time you saw me you were rude Ran me out of your office All because I wanted to waste my hubby Anything coming back to you Shamus? Trouble That's what I named her the day She sauntered into my office I sent her packing Knew then I'd see her again Like I said Girls like her always have a story Stories about unpleasant men in their lives Cause they never learn Come on, Shamus, I gotta car close by . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Film noir comes to passions! A nice depiction of a femme fatale and an unlucky man who crossed her path. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
You got it Earl. Love those old film noir movies. Decided to write about them in my novel, Ram Slade, Shamus. Yeah, I know, tacky name, but whadda you gonna do? Thanks for being here. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Also shades of Mickey Spillane in dialog. I enjoyed it from top to bottom Jerry. It's the writer in you, have fun! Eric |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Yeah, Spillane was my early hero, never forget the first book I read by him, I think it was the first one he wrote, I, The Jury. Thanks Eric. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Enjoyed this tale too, fine conversational style. Keep on writing.  "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Yep, Prasad, write on is what I do. Afraid to stop. Haha! . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
JerryPat-You are quite the tease aren't you? Well, one thing for sure however it turns out, it will be great getting there. ebm |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you, ebm. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A real Bonnie & Clyde moment here, Jerry. I took time to look at your website... you are prolific...good for you! This is a fine place to showcase your talents. I continue to enjoy.  |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Thank you Sunshine for reading and commenting on my silly poem. Also thank you for checking out the website. |
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