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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

0 posted 2010-11-06 08:29 AM

City of sun, city in crab’s pincers
Which seize the whims of the ocean,
You says to us that we walked here
In other lives, other youths.

People whom nothing seems to frighten
Walking in your streets, the penetrating glances
As balsamic rocks, the wrinkled hands
By the languishing angers of Tropics.

We roam on the pavements of the world,
On the new flavorsof the crystal clear laughter
Until to come down in the élévador Lacerda
Up to the low city, the sea is blue.

In the heart of the market, the celestial assemblage
Dancers of capoeira multiply movements
And knocks, the moon and the sun are in confrontation on the sand,
Happy, the violent sea takes revenge for the city.

The slaves fight and their feet
Draw arabesques contained in the summer air
bewitched and masterful drunkenness
As the fear which their rites chase away.

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

1 posted 2010-11-06 10:00 AM

much grand imagery here ...

I am especially fond of:

"...flavors of ... crystal clear laughter"

v. well 'penned' !

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

2 posted 2010-11-06 10:40 AM

Fine writing Yann, few lines remind me of the affects of tsunami throughout the tropics.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

3 posted 2010-11-06 01:25 PM

Nice work in describing a city and its people and the ebb and flow of their hearts and frivolity. Yes.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

4 posted 2010-11-06 01:45 PM

Many well done metaphors Yann

The people of that world are seasoned somehow.
Enjoyable read.

Eric

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2010-11-07 03:00 AM

Beautiful imagery and great atmosphere here, yann.
Ida

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2010-11-11 06:38 PM

Enjoyed...James

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

7 posted 2010-11-12 05:02 AM

Thanks Bruce for the warm comment, I only tranlate from french, the first draft...Enjoyed your comment.

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

8 posted 2010-11-12 05:03 AM

Thanks Prasad, yes it can suggest some drama even if it was not the purpose, some verses have ambiguity, enjoyed your comment;

yann

2islander2
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by the sea

9 posted 2010-11-12 05:05 AM

Thanks jerry for the elegant comment.

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

10 posted 2010-11-12 05:06 AM

Thanks Eric
have a nice day

yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

11 posted 2010-11-12 05:06 AM

Hello Ida, nice to read your comment.
yann

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

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by the sea

12 posted 2010-11-12 05:06 AM

thanks james for reading and writing.

regards

yann

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