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ethome
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0 posted 2010-11-03 07:24 AM



On a faded roll-a-way
she sits,
eyes ever moving,
roaming the room, searching blank walls,
blinking.

I speak
to enter her space.

After regaining a small trace of nerve
the situation begins to ease.
Proportionately,
she eventually begins to settle.

"You are truly my grandson?" she asks.
I nod,
recollecting how I'd found her.

Time wistfully wastes away,
our eyes locked.

Searching with lust,
my wandering father found my mother to fulfill his desires.

If he were here,
would he weep to see us in this rest home?

Strangers.....

I do pray the truth's discernable when she speaks.


© Copyright 2010 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Eusta B. Mae
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1 posted 2010-11-03 08:28 AM


Very moving and your last line for me was powerful.  I like the grit of your writing. ebm
JerryPat
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2 posted 2010-11-03 10:39 AM


Well, this certainly hit me where it did the most damage. I have had, over the last few years, two daughters by two different mother, "find" me, the last one found me after thirty-eight years. Yes. This grabbed me.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

ethome
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3 posted 2010-11-03 04:20 PM


Hey EBM
Thanks for the last line comment, much appreciated.

Eric

ethome
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4 posted 2010-11-03 04:51 PM


Jerry

Not trying to hit you personally hard. Glad you came in to have a read and I hope it's going OK with that daughter.
No one alive that doesn't have something to look back on and feel some kind of pain.
Take care and many thanks for the visit.

Eric

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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5 posted 2010-11-03 06:00 PM


This is wonderful - I hope things work out the way you want them to. Enjoyed.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Martie
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6 posted 2010-11-03 07:40 PM


Eric...Understanding this.  My grandmother was in a rest home for many years.  I recall on my last visit, that she thought I was my mother and my daughter was I.  Sad, when age and distance take things.  
Marchmadness
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7 posted 2010-11-03 11:10 PM


Very sad and touching, Eric. Good writing.
                                     Ida

ethome
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8 posted 2010-11-05 07:03 PM


Thank you Trina.
This comes from listening to others that are in the situation.
Fortunately not me but my heart goes out to those.

Eric

ethome
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9 posted 2010-11-05 07:05 PM


Martie
Thanks for the kind reply. Those places seem so unnatural for the most part but a necessity for many I guess. I appreciate the input.

Ida
Thank you for the kind words and compliment, much appreciated.

Eric

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