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Sunshine
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0 posted 2010-11-01 11:19 AM




Reasons to Keep Walking…



October
is like this
when a late afternoon walk
makes you appreciate the half-warm,
half-cool sides of you, dependent
[already] on which
is sun-side up, when turning in circles
is the only answer.

Somewhere out there, a train runs through the town,
marking time in miles.

I still find me stepping to miss
sidewalk cracks, even though
that back is no longer here
to bear any burden
I might lay upon it, so these
still in need thoughts,
well, I keep them to myself

for this is October readying me
when a day in November
will hold me quiet,
like clichéd fine crystal framing
that green glint from her eyes
I remember so well…

In this week’s end,
a fall into autumn will expect me
to find that in nine, I shall still
be here, in health,
expecting even more years
to greet me,
and I won’t fear any familial predisposition
or a too-early demise…

so, I will wander my week’s end
in reds and golds, wave goodbye to green
and pull grains of life to me,
not in fear of anything, just sorry
she’s not here to count the
growing smiles she left behind.

~*~

(c) 10-15-03 KRJ

© Copyright 2010 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat
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1 posted 2010-11-01 11:40 AM


The last gasp of October has never been written about more impressively. Your poems are so very easy to read, first because you have steady, flowing lines, and second because you don't have to guess what you are writing about.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Eusta B. Mae
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2 posted 2010-11-01 11:59 AM


Lovely as always! I love the way you honor, by remembering, loved ones in your poems. Bless your sweet heart! ebm
Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2010-11-01 12:13 PM


yep...I walk all the way out to the curb and climb on the copperhead and give her all the throttle she wants and let her just drag my mind through those reasons...enjoyed it ms sun
Amaryllis
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4 posted 2010-11-01 01:54 PM


So beautiful, Sunshine....  
Best~
Amaryllis

Marchmadness
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5 posted 2010-11-01 02:53 PM


This would bring a smile to any mother's face and a tear as well. Love your poetry.
                              Ida

Martie
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6 posted 2010-11-01 07:09 PM


Yep, October is like this.  
ethome
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7 posted 2010-11-01 07:17 PM


I can relate so easily.

This is a wonderful way to lay it down in words. The hurt reclines but never goes away but then neither do the beautiful memories and you'll have them through all consciousnes.
It's a grief gift and all are glad those recalls are there.

So nice Karilea.....So nice indeed........

Eric

Prasad Nataraj
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8 posted 2010-11-02 05:07 AM


fine writing.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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9 posted 2010-11-02 08:46 AM


This is a piece you feel - down to your very core. Enjoyed.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Misty Lilacs
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10 posted 2010-11-03 09:23 AM


Karilea, this was beautifully elegant. What a wonderful way to remember loved ones who aren't with us anymore. I have always loved your writing and nothing has changed!

Thank you for this.  ooxx  Marti


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11 posted 2010-11-04 07:50 PM


I love fall and the season change....this is peaceful sunshine
X Angel
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12 posted 2010-11-05 01:54 PM


To be remembered so would be an honor.

Fall is a time of endings and much needed rest.

<3

Enchantress
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13 posted 2010-11-05 05:00 PM


Karilea, when you put pen to paper..
the day is always "sun-side up"

Enjoyed the day, with you here.

Heart Hugs~Nancy  

Andrew Scott
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14 posted 2010-11-05 05:26 PM


Nicely formed images, in picture and words. My father is still around, thankfully. I'm sure the time will come soon when my thoughts will echo yours.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

2islander2
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15 posted 2010-11-06 08:45 AM


very touching, brilliant.

regards

yann

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