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Saxy Blue |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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if it seems like she's actin the part remember she lost her heart on a treadmill of waste oh she's always known she could do better but it's the same old action emptiness takes. oh she'd be afraid if she didn't remember when she wasn't sure surfin night waves but now she's spreading the songs of a summoner spilling sweet notes over hearts she can sway. in a lounge for the lonely she's the queen of escape blowin blue ribbon anthems refrained she calls out souls from graveyards of fate sending them back through wind reeds of pain she wears high leather boots with barnacled buckles her flashin green emeralds over denim and pearls with long golden hair tossed and ruffled under the beacons of a midnight world. out comes the shotglass let the courage sink in sippin an smokin to the Lord's missin wrath but when the show opens the scuttlebutt friends drown in the river of blues she can pass. the crowd comes seasoned with da capo survival downing their liquor in candlelight smiles she gives them a chaser with a perfect revival of some kinda blue from the musical bible. she smiles at the invites late night repasts with the guests all braying their nightcap requests but she'll turn them off like a bad broadcast cause their tunes are the ones she's tryin to forget in a lounge for the lonely she the queen of escape blowin blue ribbon anthems refrained she calls lost souls from graveyards of fate then sends them back through wind reeds of pain [This message has been edited by ethome (10-30-2010 12:05 PM).] |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Ohh so lovely... felt this, heard this.. superbly written! The voice is perfectly meshed with subject. So many favorite parts it`s difficult to pinpoint just one... wonderful  Best~ Amaryllis |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
got to love a good sax and the notes she sings not only to the ears, but to the soul... enjoyed sir... great stuff here! |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
That was something else! Loved it! ebm |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You always know how to play...sweet poet man |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
fine writing. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Amaryllis those are kind words I appreciate the time you took to read and comment. Eric Cpat Yep the ol sax can be the bluesy catalyst between heart and mind. Many thanks for the positive comments and the visit. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks EBM Glad you enjoyed and stopped in to say so. Eric Paula Longtime no contact. Great to see your name here again. Thanks for the lovely comment. Still got the big lizard?? Take care Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Prasad Thanks so much my friend! Eric |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
WOW! I really liked this a lot! ooxx Marti |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Misty Thanks for the "WOW!" I surely appreciate that very much. Eric |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I like this and the gutsy way it is presented. The poem reminds me of a "she" within my realm of life. You captured the futility completely within the lines of this poem of struggle and retreat. Very nicely done. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank Jerry That's what I was trying to do. Even though one has great talent that doesn't separate them from the heartaches we all experience. Many thanks Eric |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
she wears high leather boots with barnacled buckles her flashin green emeralds over denim and pearls with long golden hair tossed and ruffled under the beacons of a midnight world. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ What a magnificent scene you've painted with your words. The pain is so vivid and yet the smoke and mirrors gave it a certain ambiance. Made me squint a wee bit. Fabulous poem, good poet sir~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Blues I always appreciate your visits and comments. Eric |
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