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Cpat Hair

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0 posted 2010-10-27 10:22 AM

The leaves still holding wear a bedraggled frown of wet
And the sumac has shed her bright red gown to stand in shiver
As scouring wind scrubs the lawn half clean of what’s left
Of those that have fallen before to lie a soggy mat

October spends its ends in brown and grey
Contemplating the sleep lidded sun as might a lover
Who wakes first to see the other rouse
Knowing they will rise and dress disheveled rush
With half smiles and promised calls
Before letting go of door as it closes

Hickory’s staggered sway at slap of wind
Bleeds final yellow stems and colours swirl
When eddies form in confusion of straight walled lines
And lichen green bole
revealing false calm
That lets them settle in drifts

What month
this herald begins of fallow bed
In wait for pale dress white to rest stare eyed watch of door
For signs her lover has returned
Knowing when he did
He would leave again in time
And she would dread the month’s soft N
As it begins to sing of snow

She weeps within her loam

And I contemplate the Sumac’s nude form
While along the limestone bluffs the Blue
Lies in hushed drape of mist
Whispering

I am
Your home

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

1 posted 2010-10-27 10:45 AM

As always your words are moving. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Eusta B. Mae
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since 2010-05-03

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2 posted 2010-10-27 10:49 AM

Sir...your sensual images of the season are outstanding...your home on the Blue obviously feels good on you...ebm

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

3 posted 2010-10-27 10:49 AM

I feast on the visual banquet you've provided... even as my heart is touched by the yearn and longing. Brilliant work, my friend!

Cpat Hair

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4 posted 2010-10-27 11:16 AM

Ms Trina... thank you for looking in. I am pleased the words could speak to you.

Cpat Hair

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5 posted 2010-10-27 11:19 AM

Ms Mae...
thank you ma'am, for the kind words. The Blue...and that home, exist only in dreams and words ma'am. A yearning in aggregate
feebly described then draped on these pages

your kindness, is truly appreciated

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

6 posted 2010-10-27 11:20 AM

Suthern... your reply is greatly appreciated and leaves me honored that the words might touch you in some way

Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

7 posted 2010-10-27 11:33 AM

So beautiful... the voice is spot-on for the subject; I always adore your rich imagery and language... wonderful

Best~
Amaryllis

Cpat Hair

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8 posted 2010-10-27 11:35 AM

Ms Amaryllis,
you're very kind, thank you. I am honored you found something in this or any of my scribbles that pleases

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

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West Coast

9 posted 2010-10-27 01:06 PM

one of them places glued on a wall that one can walk into and become glued too..kewl stuff guy

Cpat Hair

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10 posted 2010-10-27 01:07 PM

Thanks for the eyes onthis DS. Appreciate your review here..

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

11 posted 2010-10-27 03:17 PM

In amazing melancholy beauty this piece plays the blues that don't necessarily overwhelm but simply heal from accepted reality within. Yes, the cycles are always reminders of the various gifts of life.

Very nice work!!

Eric

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

12 posted 2010-10-27 03:20 PM

Eric,
thank you for the kind review...
I appreciate your eyes and comments

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

13 posted 2010-10-27 07:12 PM

Ron...I always thought October sang my song...but it seems, I'm not alone. You have captured the hold this time of year has on change and mood, beautifully.

Dr.Moose1
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since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

14 posted 2010-10-27 08:37 PM

Cpat,
As always the visuals never disappoint, your descriptive powers outstrip that of mere mortals. I am both humbled, and inspired by your words.
Doc

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

15 posted 2010-10-27 10:19 PM

Hickory’s staggered sway at slap of wind
Bleeds final yellow stems and colours swirl
When eddies form in confusion of straight walled lines
And lichen green bole
revealing false calm
That lets them settle in drifts

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I love that verse.  Makes me want to laugh and weep at the same time...I suppose in anticipation of the changing seasons, and for the
days, months, and years that have passed into one another... suffice to say, I am always overcome with emotion after reading you.

Thank you for coming back to the blue pages.

Many hugs to you, Cpat~

Cpat Hair

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16 posted 2010-10-28 04:33 AM

Martie,
thank you for looking in and for your kind words. I'm honored you find something of beauty in this

Cpat Hair

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17 posted 2010-10-28 04:34 AM

Doc... you are entirely too kind sir.... thank you

Cpat Hair

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18 posted 2010-10-28 04:37 AM

Ms Blues.... i love the hugs~

and your oh so generous words
thank you

Prasad Nataraj
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Bangalore,India

19 posted 2010-10-28 06:27 AM

Wow! fine writing.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

20 posted 2010-10-28 08:38 AM

Prasad, thank you for looking in.. and your nice words

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

21 posted 2010-10-28 01:22 PM

quote:
I am
Your home

and one always feels
quite welcome, no matter
the weather.

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

22 posted 2010-10-28 01:33 PM

Ms Sun... thanks for looking in.

the Blue shares her welcome regardless of the season, to those who would look and hear her quiet songs

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

23 posted 2010-11-01 08:19 PM

Here, the Sumac is not quite ashiver, the locust perhaps.

This is crisp, m'friend

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

24 posted 2010-11-01 08:41 PM

Man, you do have a way around words, descriptive phrases and down to earth old fashioned poem-writing. I can learn from you.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

25 posted 2010-11-01 11:59 PM

Brother Wranx... good to see you here!
early this year, with timely rain and wind the sumac lost hers with untimely modesty

glad you dropped in sir.. thanks for the nice words

Cpat Hair

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26 posted 2010-11-02 12:00 PM

Jerry Pat,
thanks for the eyes on my scribbling and your kind words.....

Winter
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since 2010-11-01

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On the autumn wind

27 posted 2010-11-02 12:29 PM

I must have breathed december on your words...lol
what a poem, you write so beautifully!

.*.*.Winter*.*.*

Cpat Hair

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Posts 11793

28 posted 2010-11-02 12:31 PM

Winter... December is another lady all together (chuckling)

you are extremely kind to leave such nice words, thank you

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