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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY 
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I am openly reserved I wonder what you think of me I hear the voices, taunting I see the angels crying I want to break free I am openly reserved I pretend that nothing really matters I feel afflicted with guilt I touch with ignominy I worry you'll know I cry without feeling I am openly reserved I understand life is unjust I say the world will go on I dream about the end of this travesty I try to be free I hope you understand I am reserved - openly. (I AM repost challenge) -Trina. |
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Yuka Member
since 2010-08-19
Posts 71china |
a good writing with distinct personality i like this |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done ma'am... nothing wrong with being reserved, openly you really paint a nice portrait of who you see yourself as. I enjoyed |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
I like your style here and your unique response to I AM...good write! ebm |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Yuka, Cpat, EBM - Thanx, I appreciate your comments. I found this to be a bit difficult, because of all the "I", but I'm satisfied with the result.  Thanx for looking in.-Trina. "To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose." |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
THIS touched me very much. You covered much of the inner you and the outward world and not everything needed answers, you seem to know the answers and that, then is the problem. Sometimes we are better off not knowing. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I am impressed! Sincerely so am I.  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
I too am impressed.You do truly know who you are, even though you sometimes do not think so. Give yoursel more of what is due you.latearrival |
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Winter Junior Member
since 2010-11-01
Posts 10On the autumn wind |
That is very honest, good writing. |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
fine writing. "Hardwork pays in the long run" |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Jerry, Andrew, LateA, Winter, Prasad - Thanx for looking in I appreciate the time you took to read and respond. -Trina. "To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose." |
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