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wicked
Junior Member

since 2010-01-29

Posts 22
Florida, USA

0 posted 2010-01-29 09:19 PM

Back to back and eye to eye
heart to heart we laugh and cry

Step by step we lose our way
Word by word forget to say

Kiss by kiss we say goodbye
Truth by truth we live a lie

Hour by hour times run short
Piece by piece our lives distort

Gift by gift eachother take
Beat by beat our hearts will break

Fall by fall we learn to fly
Breath by breath we live to die

Cut by cut our wounds will heal
Pain by pain forget to feel

Day by day we will not wait
For Love by love we learn to hate

copyright 2010 LD

I am that I am,
And that makes it me.
I float like a rock
But I sting like a bee.

[This message has been edited by wicked (01-30-2010 02:19 PM).]

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2010-01-29 11:11 PM

A very impressive first posting indeed Lexie.

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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2010-01-30 01:38 AM

Very impressive indeed, Wicked. (You might check the spelling in that forth verse) Welcome to the sight, I love the see new talent.
Ida

Helen Gabelli
New Member

since 2010-01-29

Posts 3

3 posted 2010-01-30 07:43 AM

For me, I learned what love is because of hate.

wicked
Junior Member

since 2010-01-29

Posts 22
Florida, USA

4 posted 2010-01-30 07:38 PM

thanks.

I wrote this one because everything contradicts itself in some way, but in contradiction, in the irony of it, there is completion.

I am that I am,
And that makes it me.
I float like a rock
But I sting like a bee.

kindredspirit
Member

since 2009-05-19

Posts 156

5 posted 2010-02-04 01:57 PM

beautiful. simple, yet profound. and yes, i love the irony.

JJazsmena
New Member

since 2010-02-04

Posts 1

6 posted 2010-02-04 05:57 PM

Simply Beautiful... I love it!!

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

7 posted 2010-03-28 01:00 AM

Clever use of repetition thoughout but perhaps the work may have been better if it were expanded and broken up into stanzas.

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

8 posted 2010-03-31 12:07 PM

Most excellent. I like the feel and the flow. I bow to you and yours.
Peace... and by that, I mean Peace.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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