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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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she said it was insomnia and she had a dollar in her pocket, so she would buy a donut and take those legs of hers out walking to see if their lovely would rub off on dawn like that glisten lipstick does on glass and she did that thing with her hair too taking it down and then putting it back up filling in the answer to my questions about the mona lisa and how she would look with her hair pulled back and a real smile on we scattered small talk on the table by the door and I imagined it fell through the slats after just a nothing special residue on grey concrete but I did look around for the sounds of her voice that she left behind as an occasional reminder that angels always do favors for their children ___________ daark |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I admire how you can build so much character in short evrse..and add the insights others often miss.. your ending line made me think of an angel and not an angle... truly enjoyed sir and as always am impressed |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks amigo |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
D- when you put pen to paper you have the brilliance to turn the mundane into captivating masters...you are always a pleasure. Eusta B. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks ebm lady |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
I always look forward to your posts, Dark, and am never disappointed. Truly enjoyed this! ~Sunkissed  |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
Just beautiful....like a relection of an afternoon I once had with only a dollar in my pocket and even a real bad case of insomnia actually...thank you I really enjoyed this one!!! ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sunkiss...thanks lady friend _______________ ms angel, thanks for looking in babe |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
I really like the image your words paint. -Trina. There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
some sweet stuff here, darkk~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
trina...thanks so much ms ________________ bb-bel1e...thanks little one |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: You are so beautifully inspired, this is exquisite in its wholeness. I do always count on the favors of angels ... to face all of life's challenges. Wonderful write. Love, Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks ms mar..you always smile me |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The first stanza took me back four decades [gads I'm getting old...] to a bare-legged naive' who stood alone in the cold warming only to the pink of the Dunkin' Donut sign. I'm back...  and I'm reading.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
well ms sun, if you ever get out this way, stop by and we will make some sugarcoatedohdamn's disappear..thanks for snacking on this one. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
One never knows...it could happen! |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
You have some vivid images in this poem. I could picture myself actually being there. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Wowser, the heavens are mesmerizing through your angelic eyes. Very cool D~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun, thanks babe _________________ eb, thanks guy for the read ___________________ babyblue..thank you for the wiggle babe |
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eminor_angel Member
since 2003-05-22
Posts 323Canada |
your poetry flows so well. a pleasure to read. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I'll swear you have some Raymond Chandler and Mickey Spillane blood cursing through your veins, sir....nicely done. |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
I love this poem but don't know quite what I can add to all the previous comments. The metaphors are brilliantly original. I could compare the whole poem to an Edward Hopper tableau. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
emine..thanks so much _________________ Deer, thanks so much guy...you bless me _____________ Bastet, thanks so much for your reads [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (10-29-2010 11:10 AM).] |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Dark, this is another one that slipped by while I was out... insta-fave, one of your best, so genuine and wisful/sweet, I adore it! Best to you~ Amaryllis |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
A'mary, thanks so much ms |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
DS you put a new angle on the perspective of angel qualities.....Tastefully done my friend! Enjoyed the read. Eric IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS...Angels have special gifts...I think you may have some yourself. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
et, thanks so much my friend _____________ ms martie, thanks little neighbor...you are an angel yourself.. |
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