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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. Sometimes still I’m so ashamed Of having been With her Back then So many Young men Were trapped In mistakes By their own Decency It could be said In the end I was lucky Perhaps that Fate or God Felt someone good Finally should be Happy And yet last night In an autumn dream . . . A stranger I Never met before Mentioned her Just in passing And now it’s all I know I will Think about The whole day . |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Some memories keep coming back, because we must forgive ourselves for what we think have been mistakes. You have expressed this very intensely. M |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done sir.... you've captured how the mention of a name takes us back to our regrets or our mistakes and brings them full circle again.. enjoyed |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Thank you It's pointless except as practice to write unprovoked. . . Thanks again John . |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LOL in my case sir...it is pointless to write, but I do it anyway.... |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
It's a solid piece of work, John. It has a spare, restrained voice. It doesn't waste any words getting to the ending, yet the ending manages to feel like a surprise. It has some of the feeling of The Greek Anthology stuff, with the clear voice talking about stuff nobody can put into words, and managing to do so with great clarity. It feels like this is the sort of poem you've been hunting for, and I'm glad to see it. Does it feel any different than some of the others, or does it feel pretty much the same for you? Because, as you can see, it feels like a solid step to me. All my best, Bob Kaven |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Bob, I really don’t think you can be anything but ready for such poems, or more accurately for the one who needs a capable scribe when he appears. They come from someone of whom I am apart from such times wholly unaware addressed to others I don’t see. They’re never deliberate on my part, I simply record them and otherwise try to stay out of the way. I could never be him; the price is too high. Thanks for reading. John . |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I have long been a fan of your poetry, John and would never presume to criticize your syyle of writting since that is why I enjoy it. Keep writing, I'll keep reading. Ida |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
It seems we're pretty much in agreement about that, John. That's why it helps to do a fair amount of writing, to keep the instrument in shape for those times when it's needed; or for doing all those hours of meditation, so your attention is more likely to be one-pointed on those occasions when, as the taiji folks would have it, you begin after the other person begins, but you arrive there first. If I knew more about basketball or hockey, I'd probably try talking about one of those things. But I don't. I even get the injunction, "First you eat, then you sleep" backwards half the time. I eat my sleep first, then I have no Idea what to do. Whatever. Best, Bob Kaven |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
We all "contain multitudes", that are not redundancies of musing, and yet worldly loneliness leaves strange patterns in falling through time to our awareness(es).  Thanks for the good work. |
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