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Open Poetry #46

Anterior Thoughts

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

0 posted 2010-10-04 01:58 PM

Once upon a time
grief was but an impatient
child hungering & emeralds
stared haughtily at new
blossoms

an amaranthine pursuit
best told in secret
for eyes despised such
weaknesses as unrequited
or broken heart

three words linger

wisps of past tangled
in naked trees hoping
rebirth under a shower
of stars where untethered
dreams ascend

shallow the grave
bearing witness
to past offerings
for once upon a time
grief was but an
impatient child
hungering...

~Sunkissed

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

1 posted 2010-10-04 02:29 PM

for once upon a time
grief was but an
impatient child
hungering...

I love that! (and the rest of the poem in between) Eusta

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2010-10-04 03:47 PM

"shallow the grave
bearing witness
to past offerings"

wording and imagery I wish I had written ma'am....

truly enjoyed your offering

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

3 posted 2010-10-04 04:13 PM

Eusta, it's so nice to see you comment here. Thank you for the kind words!

Captain, then we'll just agree to appreciate the works of one another. Thank you for taking the time to read!

~Sunkissed

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2010-10-05 06:41 AM

impatient children make old people appreciate monotony they say...

enjoyed your art here ms

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2010-10-05 12:12 PM

loved this!

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

6 posted 2010-10-05 01:26 PM

Thank you PS, I appreciate your looking in.

~Sunkissed

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2010-10-06 09:05 PM

wisps of past tangled
in naked trees hoping
rebirth under a shower
of stars where untethered
dreams ascend

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Oh goodness me, this is really pretty.
Love the free fall and breathless feeling this left me with.

Wonderful poem, Sunkissed lady~~

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