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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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It was called, A Fly on the Wall Cafe. As I digested thoughts of mug warts and nasty nettles from the plastic vinyl and the lace curtains, I turned the pages of the menu as if they were time itself hinting at bologna omelets, liver and onions, even chipped beef. There was a hum inside that was bright with sunflowers, and children slurping long worms of spaghetti. I even saw a glass of laughter milkshake blowing a straw paper that hit my heart, but I didn't see a single fly. Would you like a glass of cool? the waitress winked and made another line on her face. There was precious room for another so smiled was her skin and lubricated by bacon grease and the cubed butter slathered creamy yellow onto pumpernickel, raisin or a sourdough slice of fresh backed every day bread. Did I really settle for tuna fish and french fries, even a coke, when I could have had a butter-battered blueberry delectable? My senses were caught in the plates that passed, breathing dumplings and real maple syrup. I couldn't tell you what I ate but I know that I was full and as I drove away I found tucked into the neck of my best dress a napkin where I'd written these words. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Good that there were no flies around, not even on the wall! This was colorful and rendered like a painting, it felt like sitting there with you, watching you take the scene in and writing it. Absolutely lovely! Love, Margherita  |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wow, Martie!! I REALLY like this piece! Your descriptions are absolutely wonderful. (I know because I've been in those places!) "Would you like a glass of cool?" Best line of all....love it!  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Agreeing with 'Deer here...that "cool" line made me thirsty! Absolutely delicious! |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Martie, I am not sure I have words for the way this discriptive piece makes me feel. There is a homeliness here that is comforting, though, and a joy that becomes enticing in the simplicity of welcome. Your writing is marvelous and heart-warming. I really enjoyed this poem, and it lures me back to simpler joys and hositality.  Wonderful piece!~Karen |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Beats the heck of driving through Mc Donalds, doesn't it? A great place to create a wonderful poem. Ida |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Much enjoyed reading this. For some reason I imagine a Sunday, no pun intended. Your order sounds delicious, and your description of the waitress is precious. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
I imagine a great writer would be drawn to such a treat. A plate full of down-home inspiration is always good food for the soul. Superb telling, poetess My compliments to the sammich lady. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well it both made me grin, and think...so I think it ia bit more than just for fun.. ( chuckling) always a pleasure to read you ma'am... this is certainly no exception |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Martie-Mouthwatering images and uplifting atmosphere...all that is missing is the address. You are a guaranteed great read! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
What a captivating poem! Full of sensate enjoyments... and I love the writer`s need to capture, even on a napkin... I can so relate!  Wonderful, MartieBest~ Amarylllis |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
hole in the wall outside of dallas or molly's bellyache down around tuscon..or alice's up around phalen...sure feels like them all and my corpsuckles groan at their memory..very cool stuff babe |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Martie, This is my keeper for the week. I love it so much. A |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I'm so glad you guys and gals enjoyed this cafe. It's a real place. Wish you could join me there for....whatever. |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
That last stanza is wonderful. I am glad that you saved that napkin. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Thoughts of small town diners passed through my mind.You did good, but then you always do. Enjoyed.latearrival |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"the waitress winked and made another line on her face. There was precious room for another so smiled was her skin" I think I know this woman delightful piece of work Martie! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I've had some words on many napkins that somehow ended up in the garbage, thanks to my OCD much enjoyed this! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Would you like a glass of cool? the waitress winked ahh how i've missed reading you |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thanks so much for the replies...Hi Maree! It's been a long time.  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Awesome! I wish I had a book of these. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
fine 'slice of life' imagery and impressionism! a very effective 'write' !! |
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