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Black Bird |
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Yuka Member
since 2010-08-19
Posts 71china 
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Like other¡¯s passing by Mine no disturbing her either I stopped to desire she coming to me This April bird with black feather all over But she walked a leisurely step Beside a small pine, over a lawn in the city center, Neither approaching Nor going away further As if a piece of cunning fish Facing against me, across the fence Suddenly like a naughty child She turned around deftly Jumping and running to lawn central One of her companions, stayed there Waiting for her eagerly |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Yuka, I really liked your visit with the black feathered bird. She looked shyly at you and then turned to perform for you. How sweet the encounter with you. latearrival P.S you are writing in English well.I liked that you used the word deftly. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
A deftly described encounter... When will those birds learn, "no bag, no bread"...? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice to read you again... I think the unusual wording that sometimes comes from transaltions fascinating... you've taken a common occurnace and painted a word image that can be metaphor for other things.. well done. |
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Yuka Member
since 2010-08-19
Posts 71china |
Thank you Latearrival, for your like and encouragement. Really happy you liked my writing. It¡¯s hard to translate my Chinese poem into English, cause always there are something in Chinese I cannot make it out for English. So your encouragement meant so much for me. Thanks easy1, thank you for your lovely leaving word. Thank you Cpat, for your visit again, and comment. |
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Capricious Member
since 2002-09-14
Posts 89California, USA |
What is it about black birds ... they're almost universally impish! Thank you for sharing this delightful little snippet of your day ... that bird doesn't know what she's missing.  |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
Very nice. I have a passion for crows! Marti |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
I cared for a baby crow once. A delightful experience that I will always treasure. Lovely poem, Yuka, looking forward to reading more of your work. ~Sunkissed  |
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Yuka Member
since 2010-08-19
Posts 71china |
Thank you Marti for comment. But I have a passion for sparrows ƒº Thank you Sunkissed. Ohh, hope always be sunkissed. ƒº¡@¡G¡^ |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
I liked this poem expecially the last stanza. Black birds have their priorities! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Yuka Member
since 2010-08-19
Posts 71china |
thank you brinkman,for your like me too, like the last stanza.several years ago sometimes when walking through a squre near my home£¬i could see oftenly one or two black birds play on the lawn, they looked so leisurely and freely and i was so envious of them. thank you James for your enjoyed |
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