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Veil of Rain
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Veil of Rain |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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The blue ridge hugged the ragged edges and the music of water flowed with a wondrous rhythm. The morning sun didn't rise in the sky so much as it was tucked in niches hidden in the soil peeking from cliffs while scampering at my feet. To be one with nature awakening speaking in hushed overtones was stirring and so far beyond. As the cool moist air spun golden threads highlighting the red sky a heron bathed in the river currents dotted with lilies in delicate shades the moss grew like a velvet robe clinging to the wake where a frog made it's home and deer waded without batting a lash. The steep rocky cliffs in all their majesty shown so bright in the copper plume of daylight. The heat rose and retreated between crevices casting burnt orange shadows as a backdrop against the rugged mountains. Towering in their might and sturdy appeal the diversity so pure and God given we were meant to catch our breath and breathe in whispers. Reaching the plateau rocky formations hung like a canopy misting rain weeped and fell silent painting the canyon in water colors. As the sun set deep in the heart of a cherished time that would forever change me overcome by the sense of renewal and the view through the veil of rain. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
oh my, you have surely painted the spiritual feeling one experiences, with nature, melding into it, feeling a part of it...and knowing your home.... Hugs Lee J. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
beautiful work ma'am... you take the eye and the spirit on this journey with you.. truly, impressive.... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you both so much for reading me. Truth is I didn't want to leave, it was magnificent beyond words. Again I thank you, sincerely~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
How I do understand that you did not want to leave this scenery! I will read this more than once, because it gives me a feeling of home ... of oneness, of immeasurable beauty. Dear Lori, you have written an outstanding poem, which will linger within me through the emotions it stirred. Love, Margherita |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
babyblue...kewl view babe... |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
A truly lovely read- especially when done aloud. Excellent writing! ~Sunkissed  |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Blues, I once sat on a rock and felt the tears flow for such a scene. Thank you.latearrival |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
A very visual poem with meticulous attention to detail and subtle emotion. Makes very good poetry. |
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Capricious Member
since 2002-09-14
Posts 89California, USA |
It may not be the same patch of grass, or even the same continent, but ... I have been here. Thank you, for taking me back. |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
I loved this! Everyone needs a place like this to visit from time to time. Renewal refreshes us all. Marti |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks a bunch, it means a lot to me that you all stopped by. I admit I love getting some feedback and knowing others read my work, I guess that's why I post in a public forum instead of a journal. It is give and take, and taking the time to make time to be a part of PIP, and I feel blessed to be sharing these blue pages with so many great poets. I've always felt there is something nice to say about everyone's work. But the truth is, I wrote this for myself being that it was such a meaningful time in my life. So you see, your replies are truly an added bonus and just make me as happy as can be. Thanks so much to each one of you~~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
superb Gaia imagery and impressionism! MUCH (long sustained) applause for this most fine 'penning' !! |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Thanks for taking me there with you in my mind...aaahhhh. ebm |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
It was like seeing through your eyes, you captured the moments, the colour, the spectacle and something personal of you, who could ask for more...enjoyed this fine poem...thank you for it... Goldenrose. Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, Bluesy gal, this is magnificent! You have captured a special moment so eloquently and beautifully. I'm in awe! Yes,I do feel it as well.  Hugs Helen |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks again for all the nice replies. Your kindness means so much. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
this one needed to be read several times to make sure I didn't miss any of the beautiful pictures... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Where was this Lor, your words took me there in my mind~~ I think this is my favorite of yours~~  M |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
What beautiful imagery, Blues. Ida |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Very nice description of a lifting of the veil, of how it is meant to and will be. Your words here help in understanding why some fall so in love with mountain and valley country. Such scenes often have a transcendant grandeur that doesn't grow old. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"we were meant to catch our breath and breathe in whispers." very cool! much enjoyed this scenery! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you thank you, very much. Big ol' group hug!! |
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naturegirl Member
since 2009-09-30
Posts 168England |
I just got round to this...late as usual & bringing up the rear guard.lol. Does such a place exist in reality? It's almost like reading of the beauty of Shangri-La in Lost Horizon. Much admiration for this poem. |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
The wordplay of this particular poem is just exquisite. To old sol tucking upward in inches to a heron getting a bath in freshwater and seeing it all through the film of rain, you had me there. I'm still there. Good. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bluesy...It's always a pleasure to read your fine poetic capture of this lovely world. |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
Amazing imagery, beautiful words. Enjoyed this. -Trina. |
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Amberzlynnc Member
since 2010-08-24
Posts 229New Jersey |
Beautiful! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Veils are good... especially when they quench a thirst, be it physical or emotional... or mentally. Good stuff here, gal...and it is so good to be reading you again! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
I have to agree... this is lovely, so beautifully written, Blues! Wow... . Best~ A |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you everyone for sharing this with me. It means so much and I appreciate you and your nice replies |
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