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Open Poetry #46

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kindredspirit
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since 2009-05-19

Posts 156

0 posted 2010-09-27 01:17 PM

Prayer moved past your aluminum foil eyes
Those crumpled spheres of imperfect animosity
Shifting disappointed secrets in denial of your present failures

My sin is left breathless in your wake
Constricted word spittle steaming onto cracked foundation
Quaking lust strands ensnared between copper palms

Handprint intellect devastates innocence
And if I entangled my fingers in your bristling conceit
drawing it out by the roots to banish from our mutual respect

Your foil lies might dissolve into a silver-tinged whirlpool of

Possibility.

[This message has been edited by kindredspirit (09-27-2010 07:58 PM).]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2010-09-27 01:22 PM

interesting piece

love the ending line

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

2 posted 2010-09-27 02:02 PM

That was intense..the last line was a surprise layer. I liked this very much. ebm

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2010-09-27 04:36 PM

So you do leave some hope in the end. Impressive word use here.

Love,
Margherita

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

4 posted 2010-09-27 09:10 PM

Thanks for sharing.

kindredspirit
Member

since 2009-05-19

Posts 156

5 posted 2010-09-28 06:47 PM

Thank you all kindly.

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