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Open Poetry #46
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pinkfrog462
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since 2010-09-24
Posts 26
Arizona
0 posted 2010-09-24 06:42 PM

Shattered

What is this feeling
This feeling I get
It must be dry
Or is it wet
I reach from within
And pull out a string
All of a sudden
I'm covered with sting
My hands become cobwebs
My feet become clay
Oh how I cursed
Now I portray

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Novus_Os
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since 2010-07-21
Posts 115
West Coast, USA
1 posted 2010-09-25 12:41 PM

I really must say, this evokes
a scene of suffering, and the feeling
of being taken over, losing control.
The imagery and metaphors are strong,
and very creative. Nice!

Novus_Os

Life is meant to be enjoyed, not just endured.

pinkfrog462
Junior Member
since 2010-09-24
Posts 26
Arizona
2 posted 2010-09-25 01:29 PM

thank you very much!

For more poems visit my website at www.wordsbybeth.com

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