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Open Poetry #46

Vespertine

Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2010-09-21 01:24 PM

Shadows cast as daylight wanes,
Silence falls upon the plains,
Night-time animals ope' their eyes,
With the come of darkend skies.

Children called, "Come in to bed,"
Daytime's creatures long since fled,
To their lairs in fading light,
To hide from stalkers of the night.

I stand below a Kansas sky,
In marvel of what I espy,
Transformation, light to dark,
Newborn stars in night embark.

I gaze into the firmament,
Vespertine, by goddess sent.

Eusta B. Mae
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since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

1 posted 2010-09-21 01:38 PM

Tim-Really liked this one...you can't go wrong with Kansas and Goddess all in the same poem. ebm

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

2 posted 2010-09-22 12:44 PM

Beautifully captured! Loved the rhymes!
Kat >^..^<

Bastet
Member

since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

3 posted 2010-09-22 12:52 PM

You know, I'm not generally a fan of rhyming poetry, but this poem is an exception. It is so visual. Here the rhymes add to the luster of the whole scene, which is beautifulally described. Great work.

Novus_Os
Member

since 2010-07-21

Posts 115
West Coast, USA

4 posted 2010-09-22 02:06 AM

Having grown up close to Kansas as I child, I can relate to this sense of change, and wonder, being close to nature,can bring. Eloquently written. Well done.

Regards,

Novus_Os

Life is meant to be enjoyed, not just endured.

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