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Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2010-09-20 09:14 PM

Adam To Eve

You open the Eden
of my fullness
your fingers speak through my lips
I hear the thoughts
of your woman
and I am easy eager
the consequence that lingers.

Temptation
combs its hair in your eyes
it breathes the longing of forbidden
and in it's cunning
it stitches the scar secrets
in your tree limbs
pregnant with apples.

You are the wet scissor teeth
it knows my willing from taste -
the liquid song of sin spilling
from mouth tears of regret;
It slithers through veins
serpentine
of us falling inside the fall.

I am you
in love with yourself
I am you
seeking your own love
we are the storm
not the raindrops,
the wing
not the feathers
and while we used to cleave to unknowing
it is ourselves now to which we cling.

Innocence -
a fragrance one cannot rebottle,
so shall a clear mirror
resent being polished.
Hindsight is a heavy hand
of a rose that embraces
the thorns sharpness
of a thorn that cannot comprehend
the sweetness.
Yea, even the hunter who has caught
the shadow of the bird
will never become it’s freedom.

I feel the snake
when I'm breathing
your water and your air
and I curl up
in the lap of confusion
to nurse
at the breast of your despair.

By Melissa Long-Monette

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2010-09-21 07:07 AM

even the hunter who has caught
the shadow of the bird
will never become it’s freedom.

ove this line...and the while was beautifully done ma'am... a true pleasure to read

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

2 posted 2010-09-21 08:13 AM

This was beautiful! Loved the apple! and I agree with Cpat-Love that line too! ebm

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2010-09-21 10:54 AM

Melissa...

Excellent...as always, one never wants to
leave the photography/photoshop/words...

Nope, just dwell here...

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2010-09-21 11:22 AM

quote:
Temptation
combs its hair in your eyes
it breathes the longing of forbidden
and in its cunning
it stitches the scar secrets
in your tree limbs
pregnant with apples.

Oh, this is fantastic imagery really!

Those apples are so sweet ...

You did a wonderful job.

Love,
Margherita

naturegirl
Member

since 2009-09-30

Posts 168
England

5 posted 2010-09-21 05:59 PM

there's so much good writing here to pick from I find it hard to pick a favourite verse and I agree with both Cpat Hair & Margherita, but if I'm pushed I think "Innocence -
a fragrance one cannot rebottle,
so shall a clear mirror
resent being polished.
Hindsight is a heavy hand
of a rose that embraces
the thorns sharpness
of a thorn that cannot comprehend
the sweetness."

Novus_Os
Member

since 2010-07-21

Posts 115
West Coast, USA

6 posted 2010-09-22 02:13 AM

Truly, and simply amazing. A pleasure to read, and an insight into great poetry. Bravo. PS. Really nicely done on the image included. I ties it all together well.

Regards,

Novus_Os

Life is meant to be enjoyed, not just endured.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2010-09-22 09:50 PM

You are such a grand poetess.

Fabulous reading, love the edginess.

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

8 posted 2012-05-20 08:01 PM

simply awesome

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