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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity 
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 * * * pine trees hug the moon energy flows to and fro hearts perceive magic * * * |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nothing more magical than moonlight, is there? Beautifully said, ma'am  |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
The moon is definitely magical. I just love your haiku's. Great job and really nice picture. ooxx Marti
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Thank you, dear Balladeer, for reading and commenting so kindly. Dear Marti, thank you, we are close in thought and sensitivity. Love, Margherita |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
Call me old fashioned but I like this style of haiku better than the one in which lines overlap. Give me four distinct lines that can stand on their own. It is the Japanese way. I know that Westerners want to adapt haiku to their taste and that is fine but I prefer a Japanese sensibility. This is a lovely example of one. ----- Did you know that in Japanese there isn`t a plural form? There is no `is` or `are`. There is no `s` to make nouns plural. It is a bit odd for me to write `haikus` in English. |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
Hello, Margherita. What a beautiful haiku. I really love the line about energy. Yes, the energy of the moon, the tides, the silver energy of night and dark green pines, all wonderfully expressed. Have you written haiku before? You seem to have a natural talent for it. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Just Lovely! Kat >^..^< |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Love it! Love it! Love it! ebm |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Pine trees hug the moon"...nice line...James |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
So pretty~ Both the picture and your haiku~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
beautiful haiku Margherita |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Thank you, my dear Poet friends, for your kind replies. I enjoyed them much. Dear Earl, you are the expert. I love to write them, but of course I understand it will never be possible to reach Japanese perfection in this realm of haiku. Dear Bastet, as I said I love to write them, to pack some sense into just a few words is a gratifying exercise. But I am not an expert. If it pleases you you might go into my collection of poems where you will find many haiku poems throughout the years. Love to all. Margherita |
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kindredspirit Member
since 2009-05-19
Posts 156 |
"hey moon, please forget to fall down." oh, to lasso the moon .. and draw it close to our hearts. normally i am not a fan of haikus, but you created a profoundly serene and beautiful image. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
looks like they are dancing beautiful piece |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, lovely image/s |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Thank you so much for telling me you enjoyed this, dear kindredspirit, dear Dixie and dear DS. Love, Margherita |
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