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Alison
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0 posted 2010-09-15 11:30 PM


One Leaf Serenade


Each leaf whispers as it drifts to the ground
Nestling into moss and dried grass for the winter
Reminding me of the beauty it once held
An overwhelming memory, not quite forgotten

I wonder if it knows how special it was
That one leaf that dangled gently in the breeze
Golden bright in the autumn sunlight
One piece of a splendorous chorus line

How saccharine my thoughts are
I can never capture the beauty of that one leaf
That caught my eye as it drifted slowly
Landing on a litter of those who feel earlier

It deserves a serenade of eloquence

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Alison


[This message has been edited by Alison (09-16-2010 10:41 AM).]

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1 posted 2010-09-16 02:59 AM


Isn't it funny how such a small thing can cause you to create such a beautiful poem.
Fall  always makes me think of how the trees looked in the fall in Oregon up around the Columbia River. Unforgettable.
                                 Ida

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2 posted 2010-09-16 03:33 AM


Beautiful serenade of Autumn!
Kat >^..^<

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Thank you, Ida and Kat.  We are have a incredilby beautiful fall.  Life is golden at the moment.

A

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4 posted 2010-09-16 06:58 AM


so lovely~

             

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5 posted 2010-09-16 07:15 AM


very nicely done...and I think your serenade..quite lovely
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6 posted 2010-09-16 08:40 AM


  One piece of a splendorous chorus line

I love that line...and the rest of the poem too! ebm

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7 posted 2010-09-16 10:43 AM


Thank you so much, bel1e, CH and EbM, for taking the time to read and share your comments.

A

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8 posted 2010-09-16 11:45 AM


I love it, Alison... so very pretty!  
.
ps: in the 3rd line up from the bottom, did you mean to say `fell`  instead of `feel` ??  Just wondering... sorry     Poem is still so lovely!
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Best~
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9 posted 2010-09-16 12:05 PM


ps: This poem reminds me of two things: One is a painting I once did, of one last red leaf upon a branch, lit by the sun... however, your words paint it much much better,  
.
And this:
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"And if I should live to be
the last leaf upon the tree
in the spring,
let them smile, as I do now
at the old forsaken bough
where I cling"
.
From "The Last Leaf" by Oliver Wendell Holmes.
(hope I`m not going to get in troubles by posting that??)  

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10 posted 2010-09-16 12:07 PM


... and you just captured it in memory and in its prestine form, unsoiled.
And you just wrote its serenade
I don't know what it is with Pip.  It doesn't "remember" me automatically, even when I type my name and the pw it gave me.
I keep trying.

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11 posted 2010-09-16 12:24 PM


Alison...you gave it a song all it's own, but more you gave it appreciation.  I love that!
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12 posted 2010-09-16 05:05 PM


yes...autumn is like that for a woman's heart as it is caught upon the spindling colors, kaleidoscopic, left either to the breath or shaking or shaking of leaves and limb.  Lovely, tremulous.  ~Karen
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13 posted 2010-09-16 07:34 PM


quote:
I wonder if it knows how special it was



I love what your eyes captured and what your heart felt while observing, dear Alison.

This is magical. I am happy that you are enjoying a beautiful Fall season.

Send a picture?

Love,
Margherita

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14 posted 2010-09-17 01:04 PM


Alison, I know exactly what you mean, and like Amaryllis, I understand your bond with a single leaf so well (also wrote a poem about a leaf and Flicka and Daisy).  Your poem is very beautiful.  I know exactly what you mean, but still I disagree with the past tense (though it enhanced the poem) with regard to the leaf’s beauty and being special.  I SAW it in your poem, and it was very beautiful and very special – but, yes, in a different way from when it was in its heyday!

Owl

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