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Trapped Inside Your Darkest Hour
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Trapped Inside Your Darkest Hour |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia 
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Soo this is a poem about my relationship with my mother, it's been 12 months since i've spoken to her and after all the hurt she's put me through, i'm still not ready to take that step... _______________________________ Trapped Inside Your Darkest Hour Store the weapons high tonight There’s a battle on the way Trapped inside the darkest hour Will you make it through the day _____________________________ There was nothing but betrayal With broken bones she slept Battered, Bruised and bleeding Her tired eyes, they wept She’s acting like the innocent But her lies they tell the tale Her kids and husband long gone She thought she’d never fail But the letters from the doctors Prove she’s not sick at all The cancer and the dying More lies upon the wall With nothing but these lonely walls She’ll live and die alone Trapped inside this living hell That she made all on her own _____________________________ Store the weapons high tonight Will you make it through the day Trapped here by your lonely lies It didn’t have to end this way |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
I will not comment on your relationship with your mother because that is none of my business. As a poem this does work and it leaves the reader with an impression, unsettling as it my be. |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Thankyou for taking the time to comment and read. I appreciate it! |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
It' not my place to comment on the intimacies of others; but your poem was powerfully and elegantly wrought. |
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