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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2010-09-02 09:02 AM

When it came August
Blackbirds returned to sit in long lines
On wires stretched between poles as they waited
For the season again to turn and call to wing
The thousands they have become
In their gatherings here

Raucous cries split harmony into discord
To rattle the sunrise into bloodshot stare
That tries to hide behind
The clot of clouds left over
From an aborted attempt to rain

August does not suffer Her well
And I have given to the thoughts of her
Enough that she may find another bed
To lie in love with sky that owns her
As he holds her in a clench finger dream
Resembling the way it was when she
Was moved into the depths of crescendo release

Some thunder
Some storm of souls
Roiled into the center of a night
Spent in sleepless dreams

Pass the grains of sand through days
As once water trickled between
The cupped palms that tried to hold
The wet of her when she moaned along the edges
Of slow dawns

And the birds will leave
To fly where ever it is that blackbirds fly
When the earth turns again on axis
Letting the winds of colder days begin

August brings the dust
And settles it soft upon their wings

While I dream on stifling nights
Of her
And of Rain

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2010-09-02 09:22 AM

they say blackbirds and crows disappear into the shadows under the eves and never leave...

very cool slice of time in this one guy!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2010-09-02 09:30 AM

They say a lot about blackburds and raven or crows it seems... from stealing fire for man, to carrying he dead of souls..

appreciate your eyes on my scribbles sir..

many thanks

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

3 posted 2010-09-02 09:51 AM

Beautiful writing, Captain, as always.

~Sunkissed

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2010-09-02 10:24 AM

thank you ma'am.. you're always kind with your replies

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

5 posted 2010-09-02 10:56 AM

You seasoned the poem well (couldn't resisit the pun) Cpat. Enjoyed your august scribbling. ebm

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2010-09-02 12:06 PM

(chuckling)
ma'am... my more seasoned words the ones that get spicy, I don't post here....

appreciate your looking in, and you pun.

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

7 posted 2010-09-02 08:55 PM

My... you don`t own a tired cliche or an old metaphor... you must have quite a storehouse there, Cpat! Very nice, here

~A

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2010-09-02 09:01 PM

oh, it seems to me if you read much of my stuff, you'll see repeated themes, forms, and metaphors, along with some tired over use of words..... but your kind words ma'am..are greatly appreciated and taken as a high compliment indeed.
so I thank you...

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

9 posted 2010-09-03 01:01 AM

there are only so many words in the English language
it is the way you arrange them that brings the pleasure
much pleasure here

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

10 posted 2010-09-03 07:50 AM

you're kind ma'am...
thank you for such nice words

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