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jcata003 New Member
since 2010-08-28
Posts 4U.S |
Morning breaks, Light leaks over the blooming senses As it curves and bounds Instantaneously Around everything From the silent swaying trees And its spring-time leaves To the loud, brazen city Capturing the attentions of Taxicabs and business people Life springs from coffee cups Bottled up in rushes of caffeine The loud murmur of many voices Words that meet each other Then crash onto concrete Pure activity takes life and Gives it meaning Noon calls Cubicle holding cells hold captive Minds immersed in a medley of the mundane White collar workers Stretch back into their seats As a symphony begins A symphony composed of The ringing of phones Followed by the grinding of pencil sharpeners And the yawning of mouths Complimented by the Monotonous rhythm of stroked keys All held by the ticking clock Evening looms Over still cars On the highway As eager souls head home Daylight slowly recedes Working its way back from the earth Making room for darkness Night falls Elegantly Onto the cold streets Suburbia is pervaded by silence Whereas the city erupts Lavishly with sounds of laughter Shadows walk with crossed arms The smell of fresh coffee is replaced By the smell of cigarette smoke Enticing aromas beg for attention Lasting for only a few hours Until once again Morning comes |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Welcome to Pip, dear jcata. You display a great poetic talent in this fascinating piece! Enjoyed this "cycle" greatly. Love, Margherita  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
May more readers get a chance to enjoy this ... |
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Novus_Os Member
since 2010-07-21
Posts 115West Coast, USA |
Excellent post. Imagery is very strong, with the movement throughout the poem. Thank you. Regards, Novus_Os Life is meant to be enjoyed, not just endured. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Dawn light and caffeine make a good mixed metaphor, and cubicle makework days can be a |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
you've painted the cycle well.. very nicely done |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Ditto all the comments above. Enjoyed! ~Sunkissed |
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jcata003 New Member
since 2010-08-28
Posts 4U.S |
Thank you guys for all the positive feedback. I really appreciate it! |
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