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Open Poetry #46

Mr. Right

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

0 posted 2010-08-26 12:29 PM

His breath, minty and warm
brushed softly agaisnt my cheek
when he spoke
We smiled, remembering how we
danced together in a crowd
yet saw only one another

His brandy eyes, filled
with laughter reminds me
of Summer
he is smooth as caramel
& just as pleasing
his incandescent smile
crumbles my facade
with manly hands,
he leads me
into love

~Sunkissed

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

1 posted 2010-08-26 12:34 PM

Nice, smooth...
Like butter.
Very nice write

JL

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

2 posted 2010-08-26 12:41 PM

Thanks JL, your comment is appreciated.

~Sunkissed

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2010-08-26 01:48 PM

you paint a nice picture of someone who for you is Mr Right...

well done ma'am... the romantic seems to suit you well.

Jesse Jaymz
Senior Member

since 2000-01-24

Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio

4 posted 2010-08-26 02:07 PM

Make that person in your poem a female and send her my way please.

Very nice write.

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

5 posted 2010-08-26 06:10 PM

Captain, this is a peice of fiction inspired by a friend who's name happens to be the title. I'm not sure how well I do romantic, but I do try. Thanks for reading!

Jesse, I couldn't help but chuckle when I read your comment. Thanks for the read.

~Sunkissed

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