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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Your smile crushes the very essence of me I am expired in knowledge yet reborn with love your eyes once captured, reveal amber glow of twin volcano's fire joining souls in one momentous passing how your quiet strength inspires these tears tears gently kissed with whispered glance "on an island, on an island alone with you..." curtains fall, and there in your hands, my beating heart... ~Sunkissed  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
pretty romantic stuff ma'am... certainly shows a softer side of love enjoyed.... |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Thank you Captain, although these words are nothing compared to your works and many other poets here. Your comments are truly appreciated. ~Sunkissed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I don't think you can compare one poet to another or the way they express themselves and say... "not as good" you can say it is different, but people write from their hearts and from where they are.. so you can say the words are not the same and the delivery is not the same..but it makes it neither better or worse... just different |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
You're right, Captain. Perhaps I should have expressed myself better. I actually didn't mean that other poets are better than others. It's just that I sometimes find fault with my own writings. ~Sunkissed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LOL Not scolding.... or certainly not my intent... simply didn't want you running your own words or talent down... you don't write like me, and I wouldn't expect you or anyone to, since you haven't had my experiences, you've had your own equally rich ones to draw from. You and everyone has their own voice as well... how they say things, so for you to say what you said above...isn't fair to you.. you write well... so don't sell yourself short... |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Thank you so much for the kind words and encouragement concerning my poetry. It means more than you know... ~Sunkissed |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
So romantic and lovely! Beautifully rendered feelings. Love, Margherita |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Thank you, Margherita, I appreciate your kind words. ~Sunkissed |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Beautiful! enjoyed Kat >^..^< |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Thank you, Kat, so nice of you to say... ~Sunkissed |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"how your quiet strength inspires these tears tears gently kissed with whispered glance" beautifully done Sunkissed and gently felt here |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Dear Lady, thank you so much for youf kind words. ~Sunkissed |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
your eyes once captured, reveal amber glow of twin volcano's fire ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Oh yea, love that...and the curtain call of yours just seals the deal. So so nice, Sunkissed~ |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Those first two lines are very captivating. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Novus_Os Member
since 2010-07-21
Posts 115West Coast, USA |
Beautiful. Reminds me of Hawaii  |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Yes, Novus_Os, an astute observation on Hawaii in volcanic eruption, as seen by night. As the late vulcanologist Katya Kraft called the glowing lava, "It is the blood of the earth!" Sunkissed, there are exceptionally beautiful lines and images here, and this work bespeaks of love of an ideal, perhaps through archetypal recognition, whether auto-envisioned or seen in another person. The very last line is to this reader a bit reminiscent of pre-Colombian human sacrifice ritual. Whether that was intended or not I cannot tell---and please do not give such a secret away here! The upshot is that this is skilled writing from a very well-talented writer. Cpat is right about not low-rating yourself. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Enjoyed reading these gentle words..thank you.. Goldenrose. Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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