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WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

0 posted 2010-08-20 11:57 AM

Give me a moment, to catch my breath,
But, don’t stop what you’re doing,
Hold me tight through this little death,
We can't stop our hearts from trembling,

Let’s give in to this powerful need,
Take from me what you desire,
I can’t help but crave with greed,
The passion that builds this fire,

You know what you do to me,
When our yearning becomes restless,
Let that wild obsession free,
As we drive each other breathless,

Brush your lips against my skin,
Touch me with your eyes,
Feel the heat as this fervor begins,
Listening to your pleasured sighs,

Hold me tight; don’t ever let go,
Draw me within your pleasure,
Let the love that is in your soul,
Be the souvenir of your treasure,

You know what you do to me,
When your yearning becomes restless,
Let that wild obsession free,
As we drive each other breathless,

I love what you do to me,
When my yearning becomes restless,
Let that wild obsession free,
As we drive each other breathless.

The answer is always NO, Until the question is asked.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

1 posted 2010-08-23 11:18 AM

I think this just might be my favorite of your poems. It reads like silk and warms me like .. well, never mind. It warms me.

Good job and thank you for sharing.

Alison

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

2 posted 2010-08-23 11:28 AM

Thank you again, my dear friend, I know I haven't been around lately, but when I get a chance, I drop in something I have been working on.

I am so glad you liked this poem/song.

Love like this always,
Tracey

Amberzlynnc
Member

since 2010-08-24

Posts 229
New Jersey

3 posted 2010-08-24 01:11 AM

I enjoyed reading this very much. Thank you for sharing.

HippinTrippy
Member

since 2010-03-26

Posts 103
New York

4 posted 2010-11-27 11:24 PM

I enjoyed reading this very much, Have you put it to music or written any for it? I can very easily hear it played as a melody.

It's not easy being evil, in a world gone to hell.

mikeandrew
Member

since 2010-11-18

Posts 198

5 posted 2010-11-27 11:33 PM

very nice flow.

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

6 posted 2010-11-28 12:01 PM

OK, I think this poem needs to come with an oxygen tent, because who ever this was written for is going to need it. Nice work. Thanks for sharing.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

7 posted 2010-11-28 01:25 AM

Yes, most certainly a warming and beautiful write! Well done!

Helen

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

8 posted 2010-11-28 08:41 AM

No use beating around the bush (pun), and you most certainly didn't here. Even, very readable flow of words about a subject everyone can relate to. Good.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

crosscountry83
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 345

9 posted 2010-11-28 09:56 AM

I love the last two stanzas.. how they are repeated but altered a little. It would make a beautiful song!

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

10 posted 2010-11-29 08:13 AM

Thank you all so very much for your wonderful comments on my poetry. I am working of a few cords and notes for this song, and a completioin to make it a little longer.

Thanks to every new reader of my poetry.
Tracey

Angel4aKing
Senior Member

since 2006-09-27

Posts 1372
USA

11 posted 2011-02-14 02:05 PM

Love this poem...myself...although I can not write a love poem to save my life lol I am BREATHLESS!!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

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