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The Biography Of A Wish
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The Biography Of A Wish |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631
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It is nothing, a mordent of the soul, an elixir, a panacea, a placebo for my lesions, there, in the thistle grows our drastic garden of red posies and hyacinths, such little things, on the verge, lilting as the decorum begins to bobble and slump sideways and murmur, On Mondays I can swallow the octave of your absence, red tendrils and all, miniscule against the deluge, dreams are a wreckage of black pumpkins & purple corn, that summon a lavish song to harvest, 40 colors in the brocade you've given me, tangled and heavy the years upon my bones, begin to spur and flower into cunning disruptions, and stratify upon my body like rinds of ricepaper, vellum for another wish in the complacent burial of mango flesh, listen, as my song liquifies, drowns you, inundates each alveoli, and our love in the swallowing gush, perched, begins to shudder, devoured by its own symmetry, stemcells all akimbo in the shallow pitch of days, bound in a nostrum of wine and licorice, It is nothing, really... a mordent for the soul, a tulle filament twitching in a raincoat of the purest light.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
It is nothing, a mordent of the soul, an elixir, a panacea, a placebo for my lesions, there, in the thistle grows our drastic garden of red posies and hyacinths, such little things, on the verge, lilting as the decorum begins to bobble and slump sideways and murmur, On Mondays I can swallow the octave of your absence, red tendrils and all, miniscule against the deluge, dreams are a wreckage of black pumpkins & purple corn, that summon a lavish song to harvest, beautiful Ma'am..and lush as are all the offerings you leave.. truly have nothing but respect for the talent and the soul.. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Thanks, love *~* |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
when i read you i am so totally drawn in |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
thanks so much, lady~*~**~ |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Some stunning, read again and again lines here, very good turns of phrase. "Octave of your absence" was like an opener for that, and they keep coming. Lol, some decent echoes picked up here, too. Can a "tulle filament" represent a strand of time? |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
easy 1~ thank you so much for the warm reply and insight...much of what I do write is twiested and drowning in symbolism & metaphor...so yes, the double meanings are there~~I try to keep it open enough that my reader may find his or her own connections to the pretty pictures...that's what I like to do when I read poetry...or anything else, really~ Thanks again for taking a peek inside~ ~love & light~ |
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brian thomas madden Junior Member
since 2010-07-08
Posts 32Ireland (between an ocean and a rock) |
A stunning and beautifully written poem, I am in awe of the images you have created "there, in the thistle grows our drastic garden of red posies and hyacinths, such little things, on the verge, lilting as the decorum begins to bobble and slump sideways and murmur," 40 colors in the brocade you've given me, tangled and heavy the years upon my bones, begin to spur and flower into cunning disruptions, and stratify upon my body like rinds of ricepaper, vellum for another wish in the complacent burial of mango flesh, "listen, as my song liquifies, drowns you, inundates each alveoli, and our love in the swallowing gush, perched, begins to shudder, devoured by its own symmetry, stemcells all akimbo in the shallow pitch of days, bound in a nostrum of wine and licorice," WOW |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Thanxxx Mr. Madden~*~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"I can swallow the octave of your absence" another trademark phrase that fills me with admiration... even the title--I started thinking at "hello"-- I wondered, why not "The Autobiography of a Wish" and now that I've read it, I'm thinking that maybe it is, and perhaps, therein, is philosophy... You have that ability yanno. Much enjoyed.  |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Yes wow.. a thousand times wow! You never stop.. I am hard-pressed to quote all of my fave lines here, there are so many.. `drastic garden`..`a wreckage of pumpkins`.. and on... . So, so lovely, Belle... Amaryllis |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
darn woman! How do you do it? I'm just like "wow" |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
serenity~~~ thanks so much for the great reply~*~ the admiration has always been mutual~*~ ~*~*~* |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Amaryllis~ you are a doll! Thank you <3 |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Passing shadows~~~ LOL thank you for the wonderful review~*~*~ so happy to have impressed you <3 |
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