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therightside
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since 2009-12-09
Posts 64
USA

0 posted 2010-08-17 01:38 PM


You're too late
Too much was done
As I drown
I can feel my last breath
creeping up

Eternal is the repetition
of every repercussion
A better life floats on
as I sink beneath the weight
of a so-called love

The current of your mistakes
consume the space
between my toes
I am rooted in the depths
of dysfunction

Persistent whispers remind,
'You're never enough'
Waves of your words rush over
as crushing as ever,
knock me to the ground

Defeated... on my knees
scratching and scraping,
searching for one ounce of myself
Only the silence of scars exist
your erosion has taken its toll

Mind and body, worn
So fragile, so frail
Left, only a shell
where my former hopes
my pride, my dignity
were once held

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Cpat Hair
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Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

1 posted 2010-08-17 02:28 PM


a painful write... and surely not love if it tears apart so completely...


dollmaker
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since 2006-08-30
Posts 155
mass dorchester
2 posted 2010-08-17 03:36 PM


u must have been hurt very badly......... such a hard poem to write but a good one.
rosepetals36
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since 2010-07-09
Posts 137
Pa
3 posted 2010-08-26 10:41 AM


I'm so sorry for the pain you must be feeling. Love can be so cruel can't it? I am going to be starting a divorce soon, and this write so captures what I feel and how it can tear you down.



-- Used to be rosepetals25 I never know what to say when I reply to a poem, so ignore the lameness!

Sunkissed
Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610

4 posted 2010-08-26 01:11 PM


*Hugs* to therightside, and to rosepetals...

True love should build up not tear down.

~Sunkissed.

JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
5 posted 2010-08-26 01:20 PM


Excellent write...

JL


Jesse Jaymz
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since 2000-01-24
Posts 708
Youngstown, ohio
6 posted 2010-08-26 02:06 PM


Very nice.  Love the raw emotion here.
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