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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2010-08-16 08:17 PM


I watched the children flee the field,
One by one, taking their clothes
As they ran to a sea of anonymity.  

I wasn't sure what a man such as myself
Could do to find the right common ground.
I continue to sit with the judge and exchange my thoughts and ideas.
For each time I see my reflection
I see a man slightly folded, but never defeated.

For that, I want a field to myself,
A place where the trees rise to another sky,
Infinitely beyond comprehension,
Like a sudden silence amongst a crowded street corner.

I want to wait in the shortest of lines,
The kind where I can see everything around me
Without having to wonder if my ideas
Have already been conceived by the
Snow that touches down every winter.

It is here I wonder where
two strangers pass one another,
Is a smile a ploy of kindness
Or simply an act of flirtation?

It is often we lose ourselves
In the plight of routine.
To lose focus of how we think
Instead of how others view our every deed.

I still walk amidst the heralded summer,
Still wane through the parks with my notebook under my shoulder.
Still wonder what's it like to be relevant
When everyone else may already have the answers.

In the end, it's worth a shot,
A small dark cloud
Can only hinder my thoughts for so long.

It's my fire and humility,
Stop my glare if you can.

[This message has been edited by Tomer (08-17-2010 08:47 AM).]

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katahdin
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since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.
1 posted 2010-08-16 11:39 PM


Enjoyed
Kat >^..^<

easy1
Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
2 posted 2010-08-17 07:47 PM


A lot of this is very relevant. Plus, I perceive a possible Moody Blues fan in the author.

Many good images here. If I had to choose a favourite it would be the sudden silence of a crowd-passed street corner.

The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
3 posted 2010-08-18 11:40 AM




"a man slightly folded"

if I don't read anything else, anywhere today, I read this and it was worth it.
this is an excellent poem.


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