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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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Over this opaque coruscating sea he skims my melted surface of folding combs where the fading peridot stitches into indigo, casual, too and still sanguine, he never flags at his Sisyphean task.. reaches like a glossy cormorant, ducking silver-quick beneath my waves, my billows tourmaline, to emerge just further on, perhaps a prize or not, all the same.. I fold him again to my brilliantine breast `return, return.. sea-salt and twilight shutter your storied eyes`.. the patience there enough to scatter the foam to far flung isles, sufficient to sail a thousand Baltics blue.. never a creaking hull or shredded oilcloth, only him, though the victory pyrrhic, bitter as a young chestnut, as acrid on the tongue.. once more see him rising on these hills, chin to the laughing wind, the sandalwood sky. |
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Nocturnal Pulse Member
since 2010-08-12
Posts 84Australia |
Amazing imagery. Very well done ; ) |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is the second time I've read this...had to get up and get some potato chips and read it again descriptive and awesome! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Nocturnal and Passing Shadows.. thank you both very much!  ~Amaryllis |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Just beautful! Enjoyed! Jewel of a poem! Kat >^..^< |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Your writing is so easy on the eyes and soft on the soul. Amaryllis, you a more then a joy! Fabulous. Richard xx |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Well and neatly composed! Although I am urged back to Webster's, especially for some of the gemstone and other traditional trade goods references. Both user comments above are correct: Your compositions tend to read very flowingly, yet usually require at least a second reading for better understanding. I am learning that that is actually sometimes an added bonus. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done...the flow of thought and image an easy course to follow, though tht edepths and savoring of the taste, brings the reader back to ponder.. enjoyed... truly. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Kat: thanks so much for reading me! . Richy.. thank you, my friend.. your kind words mean a lot.. . Easy1.. thank you... I may have gone a bit o.t.t. with this one and made it too nebulous.. I fear being too `tell-y` so sometimes go too far the other way, heh! Once again, thank you for reading me and for your comments! . Cpat Hair.. much thanks to you also for your words! . ~Amaryllis |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Almost intimidating in its richness of poetic expressions, dear Amaryllis! Deeply inspiring! Love, Margherita |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, Margherita! So wonderful to `see` you here on these boards again! ~Amaryllis |
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