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Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03
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Osaka, Japan

0 posted 2010-08-12 08:44 PM

My Door

Leprous red has broken out on my shed door.  It spreads.
The sun does not bring it comfort today. It rains instead.
My door has a gangreaous sore.  It`s called rust.
I must treat this cancer.  Paint it I must.
The door is never used, never opened.  It`s lost in a crippling death.
Nature`s four seasons feast lustfully on knobs, on hinges, on what`s left.
Grime blackens my door.  It sullies it.  It asphyxiates it.
I tell you this.  But being the jerk that I am, I`ll never get around to fixing it.

Because if I did, I`d have to clean the shed.

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Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
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1 posted 2010-08-12 10:39 PM

I think this goes much deeper than a rusty door to the shed out back.  I like the symbolism within this one. Thanks for sharing.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

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since 2010-07-01
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2 posted 2010-08-12 10:49 PM

Loved the last line. Enjoyed.
Kat >^..^<

Nocturnal Pulse
since 2010-08-12
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3 posted 2010-08-13 07:15 AM

Very creative, well done.
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Mi now
4 posted 2010-08-13 11:39 AM

I like this! Quite unique  

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5 posted 2010-08-13 11:57 AM

Backyard decadence expressed perfectly in less than ten lines... Gotta love it!
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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6 posted 2010-08-13 05:25 PM

No one who makes a conscious decision to do or not to do something can be called a jerk.  In the case of this write maybe "lazy" could be substituted.     But, hey, it's okay to be lazy - only perhaps until the door falls off.  


Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
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7 posted 2010-08-13 05:51 PM

You may not fix it, but it inspired you to write a very captivating work. Everything seems destined to "rust" ...


Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
8 posted 2010-09-02 01:07 PM

The Door just gave you a gift ~ fodder for a fine poem!

I believe we all have a proverbial rust door ~ real or otherwise ~ in our lives.

I got quite a chuckle out of your closing line!


[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (09-02-2010 06:31 PM).]

The Lady
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
9 posted 2010-09-05 12:33 PM

"Nature`s four seasons feast lustfully on knobs, on hinges, on what`s left."

somehow that seems to be about more than the door.
a fine write!

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