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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Above flowing brown waters Past the last minutes of sun’s light The geese hold a ribbon of sound That takes me with them into evening sky In their fold of brotherhood Strapped to invisible currents Lost in the last pointed star’s reach Knowing direction by unwritten instinct They follow ancient echoes In the fantasy of their call Shredding sound like guileless music Into the long low growl of something wild Written on vellum from broken trees The sound strips my tongue of its hold on earth And slings the arch of my inevitable smile Over the wild open jasmine of time itself |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Above flowing brown waters Past the last minutes of sun’s light The geese hold a ribbon of sound That takes me with them into evening sky ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Oh my, that is just so lovely, and the scent of jasmine fills the air so beautifully. Very pretty, Martie~ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
And so I learn something new... again... from something so ancient. Thank you, Sissie. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - you write so delicately, and a joy to read... BC |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
A very beautiful description of sound, scene and perception. I did have to look up "vellum" to find that the word applies to a cellulose-based paper as well as to sheepskin. 'Tis a great descriptive word as you use it here, though, as it reminds of a "veil"---one that you have skillfully lifted for the reader. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Martie, "Basking in the sunshine of a bygone afternoon" (Roger Waters). Loved the visuals. Doc |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nice to read your delicate wordings again ma'am.. what struck me was: Written on vellum from broken trees The sound strips my tongue of its hold on earth love the line.... |
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Nocturnal Pulse Member
since 2010-08-12
Posts 84Australia |
Tenderly worded. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
"The geese hold a ribbon of sound That takes me with them into evening sky..." ... following those 'ancient echoes' ... especially GRAND lines! sustained applause for this 'penning' !! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
I am so captured by this poem.. it is so lovely, every line a perfection.. wonderful! ~Amaryllis |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"Over the wild open jasmine of time...." Brilliant! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie...just duckie..or goosie?...enjoyed it neighbor and now the gulls want equal time. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...thank you for the "lovely" this time. Sissie...You saying I'm ancient LOL...I'm glad you learned something new. Me too...that I could still write a poem. It's been a long time.  Hi Bill...good to see you. How is the songster? easy1...what you said made me smile..thank you Doc...I saw Roger Waters in concert once and was very impressed. Hope you are well..it's always good to hear from you. Thank you. Ron...I haven't written anything new for some time but the birds have so enchanted me that the poem flew out. Thanks you. NP...nice to meet you..thanks so much for reading and for those words. Bruce...It always feels good to hear applause from you. Thanks! Amaryllys...Thank you for going into the evening with me. C...Your brilliant compliment made me smile...thank you. DS...I miss the gulls!! I must try and find some. I know they're around here somewhere. Thanks, neighbor friend. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Dear Martie this is so beautiful. We have so many geese and ducks in our are because we live by protected wetlands and I see this miracle every year, coming ang going, for months. I loved this dear friend. Richard xx |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Richy...they probably passed over you before they did me...I mean these same geese. What a cool thought. Thanks for understanding my love for the sound so well. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I was caught by the title and kept by the beauty of the poem very pretty! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"In their fold of brotherhood Strapped to invisible currents Lost in the last pointed star’s reach" oh Martie how lovely just last week in Colordao I saw a line of geese flying only they knew where this brought it back more than vividly |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dixie...I was going to title it Geese...Always so good to see you..thanks for reading. Hi Kate...they are pretty amazing birds to see in formation. Thanks for the read and comments...hope all is well in your life. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: It was like seeing you riding the leader goose into untold heights of bliss. Wonderful write, dear Martie! Love, Margherita |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Martie, I know I emailed you about this perfect gem, but now that I have been able to stay online for more than a minute or so (found the trick - well, one that works currently anyway) I had to re-read this, and tell you again, how magical it is. I am going to re-read the saved copy in my Martie file and wrap myself in it, and hold it in my memory as I go to sleep tonight. Thank you for my flight with them. Owl |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Margherita and Diana....Always so wonderful to hear from you two lovely ladies...thank you!  |
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brian thomas madden Junior Member
since 2010-07-08
Posts 32Ireland (between an ocean and a rock) |
Beuatifully written Martie. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Just to let you know I have sent this as an e-card to someone.. it is so very beautiful, I had to share it..... a favorite of mine, already.. thanks for writing this ~Amaryllis |
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