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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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Maybe days are too crowded, the hours too close, leaning one on the other like a haphazard wood pile, poised to crumble chaotic any moment. Perhaps the proximity hinders us, knowing after all is said and done, is spilled and splintered, we still must rise and meet eyes tomorrow. So we paint, my mother and I. We create.. at the same kitchen table where I stuttered my truth so long ago, beneath the old lamp her pewter is lit like a radiant nimbus around her bent head, and we chatter, of subject and style, of shade, of hue, choosing color and palette, discuss sable or fibre, and never have to look up. She is for the apple, in antiqued tones, sepia, rust, with somber shadows, I am the Calla, a monochrome lily, subtle, subdued but for the profusion of life bearing green as a backdrop. So it goes, as we press our brushstrokes to canvas, hoping, perhaps that in rendering an ounce of perfection to a flawed reality, we may, in the silence, be heard, at last. [This message has been edited by Amaryllis (08-10-2010 09:40 AM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Amary...velvet with residue of sounds on it...enjoyed this slice ms |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I am the Calla, a monochrome lily, subtle, subdued but for the profusion of life bearing green as a backdrop. as Dark said.. velvet.... truly enjoyed ma'am. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Lol, albeit sadly. A good write and good-yet-challenging read, as always from you, Amaryllis. "Beckon tearful child of wonder..." As you paint it I can see the scene, and the iconic overtones also resonate here, so eventual peace and decent resolutions to the author. "Here be lilies i' tha cheeks, not roses..." (from Howard Pyle's Adventures of Robin Hood) Well, your layered onion style of short lines writing got me rambling a bit again. Good work, and welcome back. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~~this is sweet~~~ it reads like a long spiraling apple skin of emotion~~~ ~enjoyed |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh, to have those conversations again... I would welcome them... as I did then, knowing what I knew.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I wish I could create poetry like this, your visuals are so vibrant and true to life. I can feel the love and tender moments. This is a real beauty, Amaryllis!!! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"hoping, perhaps that in rendering an ounce of perfection to a flawed reality, we may, in the silence, be heard, at last." I have only this to say: you are an amazing poet. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Dark, CpatHair.. thank you both for feeling the texture of this poem.. and for the read.. . easy1, thank you, yes it`s good to be back! It`s always a treat to read your insightful commentary.. and thanks too for the kind words.. . Bel1e of the shimmering signature..thanks for the read and for your comment also.. . Sunshine: yes, thankfully I do know enough now to soak up these fleeting moments while I have them..they are a transient gift..thanks for your words.. . Blues, thank you also, for your kind words! It means a lot from a talent such as yourself.. . And Lady, you are an amazing poet yourself..! thanks for your kind words, and for reading.. . Once more.. much gratitude to all!  Best~Amaryllis |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this brought me back to a day in time... and I smiled |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Wonderful write, Amaryllis. "hoping, perhaps that in rendering an ounce of perfection to a flawed reality, we may, in the silence, be heard, at last." All good but I particularly like the ending. Helen |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you muchly, Passing Shadows and Honeybunch! ~Amaryllis |
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