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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The foreman over at the Single Bar ranch left a message Letting me know he had a few steers that needed delivery over toward McAllister And the job was mine if I wanted it, since he knew I had Been over that territory before a few times And things being lean all over, I might not mind Taking roads traveled before I called him back and we arranged for a time Settled on a price, then agreed that I might be willing To do some work for them, come time to time. I hadn’t seen the Boston Mountains in quite a few years Not since I left Lacey there and headed out on my own Too scared of trying and too danged fool proud to turn around They’re still green and still as rough as the times they brought to mind And the pictures they paint, just as subtle and as grand as the ones I remembered she had taken sometime way back then. They say you can’t go back… Return to what was, or what might have been And I had no thoughts of trying to even explain the entire why That came to bring the world down around the dreams or hopes Since I know that once a fool always a fool holds pretty true With those who wander through life like me Never quite sure of themselves or of what to offer I got the steers dropped off and left the trailer with the Stewarts Who kindly said they didn’t mind While I took off and spent a couple of days remembering the twists of roads And of the White as she winds along strong bluffs I thought to explore once upon a time All the while knowing The curves I had sought once Would always be memories And a place I could go In my mind |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
You can 'go back'. My being here today is proof of that. Howdy, Pardner. And .... very nicely done, as always. Bob |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Hello M'friend, long time no see...and it is certainly good to see you back!! Hope all is well withyou and yours... many thanks for dropping in on my scribble sir.. I'm honored. |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
You are too kind. You know, I have not attempted any verse in a couple of years. Do you think it's like riding a bicycle? I hope! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sir, with the talent i know you have....I think the two years would not be a problem at all... I'd love to read you again.. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Lovely nostalgia, bittersweet.. excellent write.  ~Amaryllis |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you..for the nice words and for the read. both are appreciated |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Cpat? You from Arkansaw? LOL We got cattle in the roads all the time, we sure could use yer hand. A fine write that made me feel kindly melancholy. |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
I like the diction and the sense of progression through the piece, the open unrolling sense of the verse and the good way in which you included familiar things, such as people you knew, the name of local mountains, and the trailer. You didn't try to get artsy or airy, and kept things plain and down to earth. I found a lot to admire in the way you went about this poem. I wanted a bit more of a sense of ending to it, a sense of bringing things to a clean and impactful close that would have given me a bit of a punch in the solar plexis, but you did give so much, I grateful. Thanks. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
A good story, and the ending to me is a little like the original and best Mad Max ending, just going down the road. Never been to McAlester, far as I know, but I do know what an Osage Orange is, rugged green mountains are, and have long ago acquaintance with certain bluff country trails and even perhaps a couple of singles bars. This brings back a few memories in that light, so I will say "Thanks. Good stuff, and a light breakfast." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Passing Shadows... No ma'am, not from Arkansas... but been there a good many times and spent a few days in Boston Mountains once upon a time. Grew up with cows... so I know they can be an ornery lot when they find a weak place in the fence to get out then develop a taste of wander lust.. thanks for the eyes on this...and glad it could make you chuckle... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ansel is that you? grin...enjoyed it buckaroo...very well oiled leather here |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Bob, many thanks sir for the review.. as for the punch in the gut, it was written to be a prelude to those that were to follow. It remains to be seen if they will be written or not, but it is the set up, if you will. All stories need a place of reference and I am sure that most here don't remember the references that brought this one to mind. It is, if you will, a continuation of a couple of series of pieces I wrote a few years ago. If the next does find itself written, perhaps it will have that punch you were looking for. again.. many thanks... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Easy... thanks for the eyes and the nice words... glad there was something in this you found enjoyable |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
DS.... thanks amigo.. appreciate the eyes on this. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
Taking the scenic route thru your soul *~*~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
watch out for the pot holes and the washboarded roads ma'am... there are plenty of them and can toss you out of alignment if you aren't careful. :-) many thanks for dropping in...and the nice words ma'am... always~ appreciated |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~*~LOL~*~ my alignment has been crooked from GO... you know that~*~  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Well, I disagree.. you steer well enough and know the roads your on... that scenic route can be a trying drive along with being rough... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: It's good, you being you. It's all good.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms Sun... many thanks..for the words and for looking in. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~ahem~ & who says rough rides are...undesirable? {impish grin}~~certainly will not hear that from my lips~~~ LOL XOXOXOXOX ~drive on, Chief~~~~I am enjoying the ride~*~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Belle, We'll see where the road goes... as for your personal preferences, a rough ride can certainly shake things up. :-) [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (08-10-2010 02:57 PM).] |
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