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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2010-08-02 08:31 PM


I watched her from the blankets of the snow
The woodsman left their tools on
The front porch of the cabins brown steps.

She stood there with her purse.
Her eyes staring at the river
As the fence to my yard
Sought the chance to see her succulent neck
Trade its shapely thoughts
With my wool woven coat.

I watched her.
For I began to realize that this was a "moment".
A moment that transcended the way I thought
The way I searched for a clue from her faint expression

From her pale onset to her rose, pencil lipstick,
Her thinly, mused body confiscated the breeze
With the sneeze from her nose
Onto the white, thick snow.

She was alone.
Beautifully separate from anything around her,
But it didn't matter; it didn't matter to me,
Just as long as I could watch her,
Scarlet to breeze

[This message has been edited by Tomer (08-03-2010 08:25 AM).]

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Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA
1 posted 2010-08-02 11:58 PM


Such was the view
In scarlet hue
A view of you
In crystals new
In winter's glow
Of falling snow
Only I would know
As I watched you go

easy1
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since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209
Southeastern USA
2 posted 2010-08-03 12:25 PM


I enjoyed the vowel and consonant play here:

From her pale onset to her rose, pencil lipstick,
Her thinly, mused body confiscated the breeze
With the sneeze from her nose
Onto the white, thick snow.

Donovan Callinan
Junior Member
since 2010-08-01
Posts 37
Omaha, Nebraska U.S.
3 posted 2010-08-03 12:45 PM


The title drew me in and it delivered.
Tomer
Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168
Michigan
4 posted 2010-08-03 09:12 AM


Thank you Andrew,Easy, and Donovan.  All the best

Cheers

Tomer

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