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Death Song
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Death Song |
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Uncas Member
since 2010-07-30
Posts 408 |
Dance me the deaths of my brothers, My sisters - my people – now free. Sing me the dirge of the long house Long quiet and shuttered, like me. I’m bringing my rifle and powder A hawk, a horn and a knife I’m bound for the land of the Huron To give me or take me a life. Hear me my brothers the Mohawk, Algonquians, Iroquois, Cree. Give me a wide birth tomorrow For death will be following me. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Welcome to Passions in Poetry! http://mouseski.blogspot.com/2008/12/legend-of-chief-uncas-and-indian-leap.html |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very nice entrance! Welcome to PIP! |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Don't forget how much torture was part of the culture . . . And the rifle was bought with beaver and of European manufacture. Before that it was bows and arrows. Also I don’t think the Algonquians and Iroquois, (which was a confederation to which if I remember correctly the Mohawk belonged), much cared for each other. . |
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Uncas Member
since 2010-07-30
Posts 408 |
quote: I’ll bear that in mind if I ever ask for a critique. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you hit the nail on the head good job  Just write what you want and don't mind people like Huan Yi |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
First off, welcome to Passions. I really am looking forward to more of your poetry. This was a great entrance piece. We had a poet here that has passed on, Marge Tindal, and she would tell stories of the First Nations struggle in times long past. I miss those stories, so hope you have more. Welcome aboard. Words are weapons, toss them with care. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes Marge...she was a hero in her own right she is truly missed |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I like the power of this piece. Keep 'em coming. And welcome to PIP. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." [This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (08-02-2010 12:05 AM).] |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
awesome first post I look for more welcome Uncas |
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Donovan Callinan Junior Member
since 2010-08-01
Posts 37Omaha, Nebraska U.S. |
You have a very strong voice to your work. |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-05-19
Posts 8669Michigan, US |
Welcome! Again.  |
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