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Before Sleeping |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I let the river whisper the two names Of girls we never had and turned my ears Towards the soft rustling of their vowels Imagining as I lay how they might have smiled To play along her edges collecting shells and stone Or observing how the minnows darted in and out of cover But could be coaxed with small cracker crumbs Into shallow pools they dug in sand She laughed too Beneath her bed where words lay Gathered in the moss and rock to wait for moments When the half turned head of those who hear Allowed them to murmur laughter or speak softly With the verbs that moved to a slower understanding Of what might have been In a once upon a time Sun drenched bars stretched lazily at noon And covered their skin with cool shadows when the sun Had found three quarter sky not enough To peer over the tops of hills that line her way There I closed my eyes and watched As crawfish hidden under stones were revealed To the giggle of curls and the wide eyed curious skin Turned a nutmeg tone from being exposed To afternoon along the waters edge Before evening came and a fire was built So that we could sit and tell the days stories As we waited for the stars to shine that we might count to numbers more Some ancient constellations points before Building legends of our own about how they came to be And why they lasted now this Eternity After having been born of dust and love We might never understand I listened closer then To hear the soft sound of your name And began to dream Of how your own eyes watched carefully their moves And smiled as they found wonder in the world On sunny afternoons spent simply I turned And felt the soft of the you not there move under my palm As those eyes found another place to rest with you painting the colors of sighs In the hues of sun washed stone Translating the whisper of her Into our bed Come now and the owl sings its hooting call Looking for a mate within the dark tangle of trees And I averted my eyes from stream Letting go of names I would never speak It came too Time to sleep [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (07-30-2010 10:15 AM).] |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
"The saddest words of tongue and pen..." but you feather them well here, and light, and moss, and gentle babble of flowing watercourse, on its way to the sea. An enjoyed read. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you... I am pleased you found something in this scribble to enjoy |
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Eldest Member
since 2010-06-15
Posts 177Alabama |
I have 2 girls, so I fell in love with this. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I am pleased.... very glad something in this spoke to you.. thank you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I even heard the coyote howl...   |
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Donovan Callinan Junior Member
since 2010-08-01
Posts 37Omaha, Nebraska U.S. |
"Building legends of our own about how they came to be" I really like that. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms Sun, been awhile since I heard the coyote... but always listened when they spoke... thanks for the eyes n this scribble ma'am |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
DOnovan, many thanks for the read and for wading through my scribble.. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Enjoyed very much the perception of overall beauty in this touching write. Love, Margherita |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Captivating.. you speak so knowingly of the river, with such descriptive grace I feel I was there, too.. fabulous writing! ~Amaryllis |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms M... glad you found something in my scribblings to enjoy.. many thanks for the eyes and for the kind words |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Vandana... my thanks old friend for dropping by. I am pleased you enjoyed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Amaryllis... you are kind... thank you for the read and the nice words. they are both appreciated |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Beautiful and very descriptive. Made me feel as if I was there. Enjoyed! Kat >^..^< |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I always enjoy your stories they put me in a poetic mood and for some reason, I am missing the days when my little girls played on the beach |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
MS Kat, thank you for the eyes on this and for the kind words.. there has been a river in my life always..or so it seems... and I have spent a good many hours along the banks or on the skin of several.. glad these meager words could take you there |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms Shadows... thank you ma'am... your words are entirely too kind... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"turned And felt the soft of the you not there move under my palm" extraordinary |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very kind ma'am... thank you for dropping in on my madness.. and the kind words |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I felt as I was floating with the current and swept along with your story. A |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Capt...touched by this: |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Alison... thank you for looking in on my scribbles. I'm glad you could feel something of the story. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Martie.. thanks for the hug dear lady... and for the read. Both are appreciated |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Cpat sir..Just ditto all that good stuff everybody else said, for me. Enjoyed wading in the water on this one. ebm |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
glad you enjoyed Ms Mae.... |
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Angel4aKing Senior Member
since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372USA |
This touched me deeply now I know why u got 26 responses....second poem to give me goosebumps today... ~~~kingsangel~~~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ma'am.... I am honored something I scribbled might have touched you. |
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