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airedales of madison |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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was it that quiet glass of empty we shared in that overcrowded room of strangers jostling into each other as if on a trolley blaming it on the sounds of songs not the words they said, just the sounds we crashed into each other too, that morning before the sun could look at our tattoos and left painful memories deep inside ourselves on purpose we agreed by mutually consenting like it was some new drug we were consumed by I see you with him quite often on sunday's walking the airedales down madison lane with the leash on so proper around your finger and you smile at the trees as if they were people leaving behind a scent of your fingers there you said you have seen me there too on occasion leaning against trees along the walkway south as if I were dancing with them sometimes or knew the scent of them like a lover once and did I realize you had touched them before me and you wished we hadn't hurt each other so lovely _______________ daark (jaguars of glass) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Damn sir... this is lovely. like the story telling and your talent with images as well as language here. I'm impressed... but always am when I read your "scribbles" good stuff man.... good stuff |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
and still to this day you take my breath away Mr Daark! :-) Be well RDB x Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
that last line... is killer~~~ niiice~*~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
...now this I think is you best so far, my friend... j. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
cpat..humble thanks brochacho __________ r&b, thank you lady friend..you always smile me ______________ bb-bel1e, thanks little one _______________ jwes, thanks much for the read and comments |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
D-beautiful as ever and yes, the last line is a killer. EBM |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thannks ebm |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
I agree! The last line is a killer, but the line that really spoke to me was... "leaving behind a scent of your fingers there" This poem was sad and errotic at the same time. loved it! Kat >^..^< |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks much ms kat |
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